I can hear the bass. But it's hard to tell if it's too little or two much. My impression is that you may have applied ovrall verb-wash to the piece in excess...including the bass...and the play has lost edge that would make it stand out more?
The verb is sloshing a lot of clarity and impact from this very careful, well made recording and the performances. So it gets hard to judge things like level...cuz it's kinda soupy.
"Cowboy poet without a sky..." Excellent. I think you're solidly into Len Cohen/Neil territory with the lyric and rootsy appeal of your music. [I know you didn't ask...but I had to tell you how much I like the tune]
I think if you dried things up, what needed what would be a lot more apparent. Another thing that would highlight the bass part , even as it is, is a little more business goin' on...like scale or arpeggio action carrying on , leading into sections...it always plays in unison and rooting the block changes....needs a little self-identification?
BTW...it's kind of a cowboy song..the lead slide would be awsome done of acoustic or dobro!
I think you may have used the reverb to smooth the 'grit'? Grit is good...especially in these kinds of tunes.
Grit in the lead vocal, especially....dry it out and crisp it up...would be great.
There's a long wait between the 1 verse, chorus?, and the next verse. I'd suggest editing a bit of it...or have a solod, melodic harp or guit solo to stand-in for a lead vocal for the duration....
The lyric-hook at the end is real good..."that is whachoowant". On the very last cycle, you add a little tail. I'd suggest you do that for every second cycle....or extend the "whacoowant" to quarter notes on every other one. A little tweak, and cycle-action. Bump up interest.
Wicked nice composition. A little arranging and out of the verb cave...y' got a winner...as it stands, and even a good piece of film music...with or without vocal.