Hey guys, been a while.

[andycerrone]

hey, I don't usually come in here too often, mostly cause I spend a bunch of time working on studio stuff, then one day I just switch randomly to writing and playing guitar and stuff, so it's been a while. Anyways, this is something I wrote not too far back, and I've got a good song I think it could fit. But first I want some feedback on it. Thanks guys!

All of you and your broken words. Fractured sentences, sending
fragments at my throat; running like ruptured lungs, while I stand and
watch the world turn black around me. In the bathroom our veins
run in synch with water flow beside broken mirrors and shattered
fists. I'm stumbling all over these fractions; factions, I'm
losing in reaction to the star studded cast in this theatrical
productions. Quick, quick! I'm changing scenes! I'm
changing character! Now I'm sitting by a well, twisting and
turning, wastinig wishes on wasted wishes. Over the stone I'll
peer in, just take a quick look (one, two, three) I'm counting feet
over the water. I'm dreaming of what wishes are waiting down
there. Not just my own, I'm sure you'll vouch for me on
that. While we kiss and my blood hits your lips like a gas I'll
free fall into the wishers world.

 

[ido1957]

Cool lyrics andy - lots of imagery and movement in them. Looking forward to hearing the final product.

 

[andycerrone]

Cool lyrics andy - lots of imagery and movement in them. Looking forward to hearing the final product.

Thanks man! I'll hopefully get a chance to put it down on cd in the next couple weeks. We'll see how it goes..

 

[azraelswings]

For some reason the phrase shattered fists took me out of it a bit. Overall good imagery and a strong use of poetic device. Hope the tune fits it, could be great.