He Is More Than a Father

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Hi everyone,
This is a country song please let me know how you feel about it,because I am about to do the demo.


He Is More Than a Father
©2006 Irwin Byron Abrigo


(V1)
I called him daddy
And my mother told me
She has a secret I must know
But I have to wait until I grow


Many years went by then one day she called me to her side
She said son you got to know this, for some day you’ll realize


(Chorus)
He’s not your father, is your stepfather
He took you from a baby, because he had liked me
And now I know that… Must I be ungrateful to him oh no
Cause he is more than a father to me
He is more than a stepfather
He gives me everything I’d ever need
He did more than a father should
He thought me all I know


(V2)
Who is my father
And it makes me wonder
If he is human what’s his name
Mother said he never shown his face


Thinking of all the things that he hadn’t done for me it pains
So I had to ask my mother, to say those words once again


(Chorus)
He’s not your father, is your stepfather
He took you from a baby, because he had liked me
and now I know that… Must I be ungrateful to him oh no
Cause he is more than a father to me
He is more than a stepfather
He gives me everything I’d ever need
He did more than a father should
He thought me all I know


(Bridge)
Now I don’t care if he is a millionaire
When I had needed him the most he wasn’t there
My stepfather saw me from a boy grown into a man
And the words my mother said keep repeating in my head
(Repeat Chorus)
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I like the subject and storyline to this one. Be careful with your verb tense agreement though. I would also try to find a descriptive word or phrase that is less cumbersome than 'stepfather'. ("Never guessin' what I had, I just called him dad") for example, though I'm sure you can do better. Write this one a couple of times and see where it goes would be my advice. Keep the bridge intact because I think it sums up your story nicely. As always, jut trying to help and this is simple my humble, honest opinion. ;)
 
Hi up-fiddler,

I would like to thank you so much for giving me your honest opinion on my songlyrics and for the advice.... I will look at it over a couple of times and see where it can go.

Thanks for the reply.

Irwin




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