Good morning sunshine

[Irwin abrigo]

Good morning sunshine

©2008 Irwin Abrigo


(Chorus)
Good morning sunshine
Good morning sunlight
Will you shine all day long?
Would you dry my tears today?
Good morning sunlight
Good morning sunshine
Will you shine all day long?
Would you dry my tears away?

(Verse One)
Winder as come and gone the nights were so long
It’s been a long time I haven’t seen the sun
Spring is now around what are you waiting for?
I can't stand being so lonely

This morning I looked up to the sky
I saw the sun it was shinning in disguise
And in my life I need the light
How I was longing just to see it shine


(Chorus)
Good morning sunshine
Good morning sunlight
Will you shine all day long?
Would you dry my tears today?
Good morning sunlight
Good morning sunshine
Will you shine all day long?
Would you dry my tears away?

(Verse two)
Can't you see I need you we’re so far apart
My love have left me with a broken heart
I need to see her face to feel her warm embrace
I wish I’d known what she thinking

Cause this feeling there ain’t no healing
Only the sun can dry my tears away
I need love I need it now
And I was happy this morning just to see the sun

(Repeat Chorus)

 

[gecko zzed]

Unfortunately, the instant I saw the title I was reminded of "Good morning starshine" from Hair; once that thought latched itself into my brain, I couldn't get away from it.

You have here the makings of a reasonable love ballad, and the allusion to seasons adds interest. However, this idea, like the title, seems familiar.

I would like to suggest that you go through your lines carefully, and see if you can come up with alternative phrases to ones that are more commonly used. "Dry my tears away", "We're so far apart" and "broken heart" are all very common, and the song would benefit were you to come up with alternatives to these.

Just a few grammatical things need to be attended to as well: "Winder" should be "winter", "shinning" should be "shining", and "My love have left me" should be "my love has left me".

 

[rayc]

Yep, the title is the death of it -my subconscious tried to fit the lyric to the known melody despite every effort I made.
How about killing this thread & starting a new one with a different title?