Gekko, a pop tune

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Nice airy vibe to it. It's lacking in the low end. That bass synth is doing its job but the drums are a bit low in the mix. As usual I'm going to recommend lowering and panning that lead synth. It goes no-stop with few pauses. A little more attention to phrasing could improve the line.
 
You are right. I need to fix it properly on my daw. Also the lead is doing the work of two leads. Gotta find time for fixing things. Thanks for the sharp review.
 
It's a nice instrumental. Good melody and arrangement. I liked it. Mix wise...the bass seemed kind of mushy and not focused and the mix overall had kind of a grainy sound for lack of a better word. It may have been the synth.
I think it's a very nice tune.
 
Thank you Jimi for your comment! I did some eq editing on my old tune with my phone again and not my daw so that might BE one reason. The other is I never was a good mixer. Now I am getting back into music and hopefully my next mixes will be better.
 
almost sounds like the beginning of lennons version of 'stand by me'

where are the drums?
where is the bass?
all i hear is a synth voice... and it's dated enough to think this is not a modern tune.

so, is there going to be a vocal?
it needs one.

it just never goes anywhere.
work up some cool modulations so it doesn't sit in the same boring chord over and over,
throw some curveballs in there!
 
GONZO-X said:
almost sounds like the beginning of lennons version of 'stand by me'

where are the drums?
where is the bass?
all i hear is a synth voice... and it's dated enough to think this is not a modern tune.

so, is there going to be a vocal?
it needs one.

it just never goes anywhere.
work up some cool modulations so it doesn't sit in the same boring chord over and over,
throw some curveballs in there!
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Wow, sounds almost like I did a crime by sending my pesky tune here... But seriously you are right there are many faults in my tune, though I don't think it sounds like the beginning of that Lennon song. But, thanks for your comments I will try to improve the quality I send here.
Also I will try to find time to fix the mistakes I did with the song although I give no promises.
 
What kind of synth was that? Just curious. Arrangement was nice and soothing, but to my ears it could maybe use a little more panning on some of the synth sounds to give it more depth and separation? A guitar solo somewhere in the middle would be great too, but that's just me ;).

I heard enough bass, just not enough kick, the drums as a whole seemed a little low.

Had a Zelda-ish 90's video game vibe to it, felt like I was running through a town to buy potions and talking to people. Had a slight Pet Shop Boys feel to it too. Nice work, if you still have the original tracks to mess with, it wouldn't take much to get it to sound better. Again, a little more panning (but keep the main melody in the middle), raise the drums, and maybe even lower that synth bass sound just a hair, and you'd be on your way.
 
Thank you Johnny for your review. The synth is Fm8, which I use too often. I have no memory about how I did the tune. I play so badly that i leave guitar solos to other guys who know how to play it. Your description was very nice of the possible adventure with the potions. Also I dig the pet shop boys. I can see IF I have the time to improve the tune. Thanks again for your encouraging comments and tips.
 
Music Box said:
Wow, sounds almost like I did a crime by sending my pesky tune here... But seriously you are right there are many faults in my tune, though I don't think it sounds like the beginning of that Lennon song. But, thanks for your comments I will try to improve the quality I send here.
Also I will try to find time to fix the mistakes I did with the song although I give no promises.
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heheh,
well,
i'm trying to say 'hey this has promise, develop the crap out it!!'


and when i say things like 'sound like', a lot of times, i don't mean the chords, or changes, or even vibe, but maybe the sounds, the combination of drums/bass/guitar, stuff like that...
i do 'producer-speak' almost as much as i do 'mixer' speak, sorry it's confusing.

either way,
i don't know, maybe it's just me,
but i'd never post something that was only a quarter cooked..

maybe half cooked,
but if it's gonna be an instrumental,
then give it a strong melody somewhere...
and if it's gonna be a song,
throw the lyrics and melody out there and sing it!!

if it's just a demo, i always thing that's the time where you just throw sh!t at the wall, and see what sticks...
and some folks will hear one thing sticking, and some will hear something else, and after everybody comments,
you can weed thru it all and save only the good stuff.



for every crappy song i've written,
there are 10 more that didnt' make the cut.
LOL
 
Perhaps I misinterpreted your message (nothing new there) but I just got such a negative vibe out of your comments that I reacted a bit, poorly even. But thanks again for your tips and guidance, they are needed and in my case a lot.
 
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