From Now To Forever

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a new one....worried though that the message is left too far open for interpetation........
I have music for this too...acoustic rock...just gotta hit that red button...ya know?

all comments appreciated fellas...

From Now To Forever


Verse 1
Certain peculiar circumstance
Bring us together
Unusual perfect partners
From now to forever

Verse 2
Certain restless moments
Silhouettes fade and disappear
Heading for their rendezvous
From now to forever

Chorus
We all want
We all need
We all wish....to be together
With that someone
At that somewhere
Without sorrow......from now to forever

Verse 3
Certain casual glances
Passed between strangers
Leads to a new tomorrow
From now to Forever

Verse 4
Certain of the consequence
Of the element of danger
Headlong you can fall
From now to Forever

Chorus (x2)
We all want
We all need
We all wish....to be together
With that someone
At that somewhere
Without sorrow......from now to forever
 
The lyrics look good to me man, hit the red button and post it up!


bd
 
yeah man....I hear ya....gonna lay it down soon...

I just wish I could sing....ya know? :confused:
 
Hey man - Took a read through. Here are my thoughts as I read through the lyrics (although I’d like to hear the music too :D)

I get a conflict between V1 and the remaining verses. V1 strikes me as being told in first person while the other verses strike me more as being second person/narrated.

I kind of agree with your worry. Take this with a grain of salt, because I’m a sucker for story songs and sometimes I don’t get more abstract writing. I know what you are trying to say in this song (I think), that people meet in unexpected situations and can choose to take the risk of pursuing fruits of that chance encounter or not. The lyrics don’t take me anywhere though.

Maybe if there were more concrete examples of a situation like this? I actually think of a song on Brian McComas’s CD that I just bought because there is a couple seriously great songs on there (IMHO of course). The song is “You’d Have Never Said Goodbye” (Shaye Smith/Ken Harrell/Ray Scott). This isn’t one of the songs I referred to above, but it is still a very well written song IMVHO. It’s a different message, but it has a prime example of what I am talking about with the specific example. From the chorus of that song:

If I'd never gone to Dallas
If I'd never lost track of time
If I'd never missed my plane
Had to stay another night
If I'd never opened up my hotel door
Just as you walked by
I'd have never said hello
You'd have never said goodbye

In the chorus I’m a bit confused about the word “sorrow”. I didn’t see any evidence of anything sorrowful in the verses so the fact that this phrase shares a line with the hook and kind lights the way to the hook doesn’t seem to fit to me.

I like the idea you have going here. Definitely worth exploring IMHO and there are some very nice images coming from the lyrics. My preference would be to tighten up the message a little bit though as I mentioned above.

Hey – I’m just getting revved back into this songwriting thing and have mucho to learn…so take all that with that filter in your mind. :)

Later & nice job!
 
joro said:
I just wish I could sing....ya know? :confused:
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Oh....... my vocally challenged brother, don't I know it! You're talkin to the king of "wish I could sing"!


bd
 
Thanks fellas! :D

OK...so I will re-write and put the message where the meat is...

coolio!
Joe
 
OK...a re-write...
Might have to change genres....Country?
have to write Bridge music now too...
waddaya think?


From Now To Forever

Verse1
Certain casual glances
While sipping courage by the glass
Shaking off their yesterdays
As the evening quickly passes

Verse 2
Certain of the consequence
Of the element of danger
Headlong they can fall
From now to Forever

Chorus
Certain restless moments
Silhouettes wrapped in leather
Heading for a rendezvous
From now to forever
From now to forever

Verse 3
Certain peculiar circumstance
Can bring them together
Unusual perfect partners
From now to forever

Verse 4
Certain casual glances
Passed between strangers
Leads them to tomorrow
From now to Forever

Bridge
They all want
They all need
They all wish....for something better
With a someone
At a somewhere
last chance romance......from now to forever

Chorus (x2)
Certain restless moments
Silhouettes wrapped in leather
Heading for a rendezvous
From now to forever
From now to forever
 
Hello old friend...it's been a while....


I've missed our chats and your easy smile........

how's it goin' Dann?
Hope all is well in your world man......

Thanks for the kudos but, I don't think this one is gonna fly...
I do appreciate the encouragment though my friend....

I did write a good one recently...with Skids...it's in the Clinic......................:D


don't be a stranger man,
Joe
 
I usually don't comment on lyrics because I feel they can't be evaluated without the music behind them.

But I gotta say that I really like what you wrote. It flows real well and I could easily put a melody to it in my head.

Nice job my man!

Cy
 
I gots something that may bind up that constipation something ter'able.

I always liked your bass playing. Some of it is outstanding.

Anyway. The music is great. Like the runs up and down. Might be a bit busy with lyrics thought.

Com'on Joe, Sing.

Good job.
 
badgas said:

Com'on Joe, Sing.

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No way man.....I don't want to be responsible for making people's ears bleed...ya know?
small animals....(and most people) flee in absolute terror at the sound of my singing voice man...

you are absolutely right about the guit BG......the leads are busy...they are mimmicking the vocal lead and harmony melody I have in mind...thanks for listening my friend,
Joe
 
Very nice..

Is the melody of the lyrics being played? Or is this all the instrumental backup?

The mood goes very well with the lyrics.

Cy
 
Hey Cy my man...
Thanks...the lead is sort of the vocal melody....

I remixed it this morning and cut out a lot of lead..

Thanks again man..
Joe
 
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