Feed back on Song....Please.

[thebige]

I'd like to have some feedback on this song. It's a NeoProg/New Age instrumental that runs a little over 8 minutes.

You can get to it here:

Ruth's Processional

Equipment Used

Hardware:

Ibanez RD-500 Bass, Affinity Squire Strat, Maudio Keystation 61 es, Behringer Autocom Pro Compressor, Behringer Ultra G direct box, Behringer Eurorack UB 1002, MAudio Audiophile 2496, Athlon XP 3000 with 512 Megs Ram, 200 gig HD

Software:

Cakewalk Home Studio 2 XL, Native Instruments Reaktor Sessions 4.0, Crystal Audio Synthesis, AudaCity, Exact Audio Copy, Nero Express

About this song

The song came about while I was gooofing around with a freeware soft synth called the Cheeze Machine. I was playing around with major/minor 3rd intervals and a Procol Harumish/Ekseptionish/Cannonish pattern evolved. The rest came from there. This is the kind of music I imagined would be playing at Ruth's wedding ceremony(see the book of Ruth in the Bible)

Thanks

thebige

 

[peppered]

Prog rock for sure, well at least the 8 min. helps classify it as such.

Being that it was 8 min. I thought that there weren't enough progressive movements in the track.... it slowly builds up and the only climax is the keyboard or synth solo around 5:10, then slowly degrades back to the same message in the beginning (wind blowing).

The idea is there, but I think it could be condensed quite a bit to hold interest in the listener. Drums could use a lot more changes, fills, etc... A tempo change in the pre-mid (3 min or so) and again at the solo would really help add some dynamics to the song. Also, drums and synth sound fake or processed (I do like the idea behind everything, but the instruments are holding everything back with their cheap sound)... except for the bass, that sounds good.

Good job otherwise, wish I could put something together over 3 min. long.

 

[thebige]

Also, drums and synth sound fake or processed (I do like the idea behind everything, but the instruments are holding everything back with their cheap sound)...

Been pulling my hair out over this. I think I know what you're talking about though... The synths(especially the oboes) sound pretty decent on my head phones, on my PC speakers and on my stereo buuuut...

I burned a CD and played the song on a boom box we have(and it's a half decent one) and the song sounds like it was written on a 100.00 Casio. Pretty bad. I have no clue why it would sound that radically different.

Anybody out there have any idea why this would be happening?


The idea is there, but I think it could be condensed quite a bit to hold interest in the listener. Drums could use a lot more changes, fills, etc...

hmm...I already done some trimming on it. It used to run about 10 minutes. Right now I need to put it down for a bit and come back to it later. I'm sick of listening to it....

Thanks for the Feedback.

Evert

 

[DavidK]

listening:

hmmm, the pace is slow.

I like the synth Wakemanesque stuff, thats the highlight.

For ME, it takes too long to get there. After 2 minutes I know what you are up to, it doesnt quite hold my interest enough for the pay off.

The piano doesnt work for me: I heard the A B CBA motif just too many times. I wish the piano would evolve like the piece does.

You did a nice job, I like it, I personally would modify the variations with more noticable changes. Listen to Alladins Bolero by ELP (trilogy), that is a good example of what you could do with this.