Fairytale For The Wicked!

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Mr Clean

AKA Teddy Wong
Firstly, you might not want your kids around if you listen to this. It's really a Fairytale for adult ears only.

This is another older tune I wrote, many many moons ago, that I'm revisiting. (I'm working my way through all my old, crappy, demos and giving them new life, for myself.) It's a silly song but a bit of fun, humour/humor. Not a lot else to say really. Just a load of old nursery rhymes you'll all remember with a twisted view on things.

I plan to add more to this song, guitar definitely. Maybe some drums, building up as the song goes along. I'm undecided as yet.....

Enjoy :thumbs up:

 
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My four cents, I liked the lyrics a lot. Stop F'n singing, pretty good way to end the song. My only negative is, I couldn't tell was trying to go. Maybe drop a few verses to keep the length in check and help me understand what you're saying. I think I get it, but a little nudge might help. A little variation might help the song, but it was still real cool.
 
I love the adult take on nursery rhymes. Very funny. Nice work there. I'd say definitely develop this into something more substantial.
 
DM60 said:
My four cents, I liked the lyrics a lot. Stop F'n singing, pretty good way to end the song. My only negative is, I couldn't tell was trying to go. Maybe drop a few verses to keep the length in check and help me understand what you're saying. I think I get it, but a little nudge might help. A little variation might help the song, but it was still real cool.
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Cheers Dave

I've probably only looked at/played this song a handful of times in the last 16 odd years since I wrote it but I'll definitely play with it a bit more and mix it up a bit. This was literally an hour, get it down and see where I am thing.

Greg_L said:
I love the adult take on nursery rhymes. Very funny. Nice work there. I'd say definitely develop this into something more substantial.
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Cheers Greg. I thought you might like it. :thumbs up:
 
Very cool - I'd bring up the string arrangement style of the organ (but probably use strings - always cellos to the fore) as it goes.
Rearranging would be interesting but from my perspective unless you go all Radio Head Creepish with the last verse or two OR mega orchestral - find DavidK!
I enjoyed the less than double entendre - nursery rhymes need to be crimes in rhymes.
Contrary Mary had a little lamb, then she ate it, baisted, tasted , roasted & boasted, Mary saw not the slightest bit wasted.
Jack gave Jill a wee little pill and she took it, 2 days later , found by her mater, she looked it.
etc etc etc
Well done, (but that doesn't suggest over cooking the arrangement).
 
Thank Ray. I'm still unsure of the direction to take this as yet. I've give it a day so far while thinking about it and I probably won't get a chance to tinker with it until Friday so I have time. I have a vocal and piano version that I listen to to try and capture some imagination. I have a few ideas along an orchestral line, strings, timpani, etc.

Time will tell. Thanks for commenting. very helpful. :thumbs up:
 
Very creative. Too me its talking about how life turns out to be so different from when we are children to when we grow up and become aware there's a very real dark side to life. Very powerful emotion behind this tune the way you did it, the production fits as well. Very good composition. Really liked that one.
 
PDP said:
Too me its talking about how life turns out to be so different from when we are children to when we grow up and become aware there's a very real dark side to life.
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Thanks PDP. That pretty much sums up exactly what I was trying to get across in the lyrics.

Glad you enjoyed it. Can't ask for more than that. :thumbs up:
 
Your accent really comes through on this one Mr Clean. For a sketch I think it works really well - the lyrical interest carry it when the melody stays quite similar throughout. Some laugh out loud funny moments. Made me think a little of Badly Drawn Boy before he lost his mojo and I Am Kloot.

I enjoyed what you've done so far and look forward to hearing it's development
 
Thanks Rob, glad you enjoyed it. Not the first time my voice has been likened to John Bramwell and probably won't be the last.

I've been fiddling with it today, doing some string parts but trying to keep it as low key as possible. Don't really want to over do it.

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Great song concept and great lyrics. I really liked it.

Didn't care for the piano sound (kind of sounded cheap). I'm kind of torn on the vocal. My first reaction was that the vocal should be rather natural sounding. But after thinking about it for a bit, given the weirdness of the lyrics, a weird vocal tone would probably fit nicely. I'd leave it close to what you have here.
 
Hey Teddy!
I really enjoyed this! Good fun.
I like they way it's sung. The accent is refreshing (pot - kettle...).

Thanks for sharing, dude.
 
TripleM said:
Great song concept and great lyrics. I really liked it.

Didn't care for the piano sound (kind of sounded cheap). I'm kind of torn on the vocal. My first reaction was that the vocal should be rather natural sounding. But after thinking about it for a bit, given the weirdness of the lyrics, a weird vocal tone would probably fit nicely. I'd leave it close to what you have here.
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Cheers Trip. It's a bit weird for sure, all intentional, as was the cheap sounding piano. I wanted it to sound somewhere halfway between a child's toy piano and a real one.

Thanks for listening and comenting. Always appreciated. :thumbs up:

Steenamaroo said:
Hey Teddy!
I really enjoyed this! Good fun.
I like they way it's sung. The accent is refreshing (pot - kettle...).

Thanks for sharing, dude.
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Cheers Paul. It's good to do something different every now and then. I doubt I'll ever write a song like this ever again but it was fun to write and play with the words. I did have about 20 verses originally, although only short, would've took me to around 15 minutes.

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I don't know? I wouldn't change a thing, great tune, toy like tones complement the lyric content. I was entertained. Thank you!
 
Thanks fuzz. The version that is up there now is a newer version that I reworked. I think I'll be leaving it as is now. For now at least. Got plenty to be cracking on with.

Cheers for listening. Glad you enjoyed it :thumbs up:
 
This was a riot, a few literally LOL moments for me. And I love that it's a funny song that's not a novelty song (that's what I was afraid it would be). The deadpan delivery works, and you've got the perfect voice for this. The backing vocals are great too...is that you, or is that "Mrs. Clean"? :D Reminds me a little of Spirtualized for some reason. A little druggy, and good dry humor.

I didn't hear anything that stuck out to me, not much to critique. Maybe a little mix-up at some point in the song to break up the 4 minutes a bit...drop something out for part of a verse maybe? I dunno. I liked it quite a bit how it was. The Jack Horner bit really made me giggle, as did Little Miss Tuffet. The king/queen bit was the only one that didn't work for me.
 
Thanks for listening and commenting Tad. All the vocals are me. The backing is just a silly high pitched moan voice I put on to fit behind the main vocal. I thought it worked well and stuck with it.

I agree with you RE: the king/queen part. 'sucking' is a bit out of place and not sordid enough. It's the line I've never really liked and I think I'm going to change it to 'whipping'.

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Clever lyrics. 'He delivered the goods....and it wasn't porridge'. LOL. I heard this while I was on holiday, thought it was perfectly executed. All the little ups and downs with the piano and vocals. I like the piano sound. What did you use? Nice tune Mr. :)
 
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