Hi BigPlay,
Good voice. I like that you can feel the strong emotions in the songwriting. If recorded and mixed well, I think this can be a pretty good song
Some tips to hopefully help you along:
- Generally, I hear a lot of reverberation issues. It sounds all the instruments were all recorded in a room with pretty bad acoustics. I also hear a lot of problems in the low-end of the song. If you can afford time and money to acoustically treat the room for better quality recording, do consider doing so and re-tracking the song. If not, just live with what you have and try to milk as much sonic goodness out of the recorded tracks you already have. I'll start with the following few things first.
- The vocals have this very prominent sound of early reflections. Not sure if it's the reverb/delay you use, or if it's inherent in the recording due to the acoustics, but personally I'll tackle this first. If it's due to the room acoustics, you're better off re-tracking it. Else, alter the reverb/delay setting or otherwise lose some of those early reflections.
- Use a HPF on the vocals. Minimally 100Hz. Move it up slowly from 50Hz and you'll hear the low-end cleaning up gradually. Continue moving until you hear it losing body in a bad way, then pull it back some.
- In fact, use a HPF/low-shelf on most of the instruments except those you need the low-end energy from (kick drum/bass).
- There's a strong resonant frequency in the guitar chords (and perhaps all instruments) somewhere near 200-400Hz. Probably caused by bad acoustics. Notch it out.
- Were you trying to do guitar volume swells in the intro? I suggest you re-record it clean without swells, then automate the volume, or use a compressor with wacky settings to achieve that effect. Sounds untidy now.
- Use compressors on the individual tracks to tidy up the guitar playing a bit. The dynamics are a little out of control now.
- Use noise gates or otherwise mask out the noise in the individual tracks for a cleaner mix.
Cheers!