grn
Well-known member
I need some feedback and criticism.
The song is called Die in your arms:
The song is called Die in your arms:
jeffmaher
New member
The George Harrison stain is all over this thing. I enjoyed it. But the sudden disappearance of George's patented 'My Sweet Lord' harmony slide thing was hurtful...totally digging it, and *poof*. :^)
A nice, light, original take on old blues...with some nice sound-quotes. Like it a lot. And very unusual, out of the box panning and leveling. Never lost interest. Just like something out of Apple Records..way back.
What I especially like is the relaxed delivery and performances. Not trying to be anything more than what it is...which would be unnecessary.
I dig it.
A nice, light, original take on old blues...with some nice sound-quotes. Like it a lot. And very unusual, out of the box panning and leveling. Never lost interest. Just like something out of Apple Records..way back.
What I especially like is the relaxed delivery and performances. Not trying to be anything more than what it is...which would be unnecessary.
I dig it.
J
jmasek
Member
Cool song. You do have that George Harrison slide sound down - and agree that it should last longer and climax. The vocals reminded me of Marc Bolan with bit of doo-wop thrown. It's obviously kind of a relaxed demo, but I think you could work on making the rhythm a little steadier on the guitar parts.
Strat1958
Late-blooming songwriter!
The Beatles influence is obvious, without being a rip-off.
Your voice is very good, as is the guitar sound. Agree that the solo could be longer, as I suspect it will be in the final version.
The only thing 'missing' (for me) was something to drive the rhythm...even a hi-hat ticking away, 1-2-3, 1-2-3, would keep the song pushing forward. To me, the lack of a rhythm - other than the scattered hand claps - created a little too much tension in the recording.
Great song, BTW!
-Mike
Your voice is very good, as is the guitar sound. Agree that the solo could be longer, as I suspect it will be in the final version.
The only thing 'missing' (for me) was something to drive the rhythm...even a hi-hat ticking away, 1-2-3, 1-2-3, would keep the song pushing forward. To me, the lack of a rhythm - other than the scattered hand claps - created a little too much tension in the recording.
Great song, BTW!
-Mike
grn
Well-known member
Thank you all for the comments and critiques. I'm surprised that everyone dug it as much as they did, but then again aren't we all our own worst critic's?
What I think you're all saying is I should extend the solo, perhaps with a crescendo, building up to a climax before it goes back to the simpler last verse. Further rhythm was also suggested - possibly a hi-hat... I was thinking bongo's for some reason - if I added a hi-hat and tightened up the guitar part slightly should I keep the hi-hat low in the mix or do you think it should be prominent (would that be distracting)?
Thanks again for the great constructive criticism.
What I think you're all saying is I should extend the solo, perhaps with a crescendo, building up to a climax before it goes back to the simpler last verse. Further rhythm was also suggested - possibly a hi-hat... I was thinking bongo's for some reason - if I added a hi-hat and tightened up the guitar part slightly should I keep the hi-hat low in the mix or do you think it should be prominent (would that be distracting)?
Thanks again for the great constructive criticism.
greyharmonix
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i like the laziness of the rhythm in this. it fits the song well. i think the hi hat thing would work well when the guitar solo part comes in. i would definitely extend that "george harrison" guitar part.
grn
Well-known member
Any last thoughts before I try to put this one down proper?