Death before dishonor again

[jpw23]

had the guys over the other day to lay down some real drums on this track.....just was not happening...we started over....see what ya think.
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=412155&songID=5826003

 

[DavidK]

Real nice. You got the perfect voice for this, the harmonies are good too. The distorted guitar is a bit too much on headphones, its a lil too rough compared to the rest of the tune.

The fade thing in the middle isnt quite working. Its a great idea, I dont reallly know how to pull it off, maybe the fade is too abrupt. The song is great, I could see this on the radio. The patch at the beginning might be more "brasslike", it sounds a lil too 80s synth. I am assuming its your Korg? Its not horrible by any means. What it really needs is a real brass band.

 

[ido1957]

Siskel and Ebert version of Davidk's comments... lol....

Real nice.

Agreed - one of my all time favorites ever on the board

You got the perfect voice for this, the harmonies are good too.

Agreed - but we could use more of those perfect harmonies

The distorted guitar is a bit too much on headphones, its a lil too rough compared to the rest of the tune.

Now there I have to only partially agree. I think the guitar is too loud/present only after the fade - the rest of the time it blends really well... kind of an underlying effect which I liked a lot. As long as it's low it fills in almost like a keyboard.

The fade thing in the middle isnt quite working. Its a great idea, I dont reallly know how to pull it off, maybe the fade is too abrupt.

Agree with you there. Definitely worth working on as you mention. Maybe hold that guitar sustain in the background...

The song is great, I could see this on the radio.

Have to agree with you there - David Allan Coe for example could cover this...
Get an agent!

The outro guitar is FABULOUS

I know DavidK just forgot to say this so I'm paraphrasing him here... "The outro is FABULOUS"

The patch at the beginning might be more "brasslike", it sounds a lil too 80s synth. I am assuming its your Korg? Its not horrible by any means. What it really needs is a real brass band.

Sorry - you just lost me. I know about as much about keys as I do about nuclear physics so I'm unqualified to comment.

That was fun - thanks David for doing all the up-front work on this review!

Oh yeah bass and drums - came out perfect IMHO....

 

[jpw23]

DavidK, Ido.....thanks for the replies....still tweaking this, I have never had a tune beat on me like this one did.......Most of my songs kinda write themselves(this one almost refused to be written) and I have recorded this 3 times now with varying degrees of success........the damn thing just wants to be a problem child

 

[SteveE9C6]

Jay... nice tune. I was a medic in Vietnam.

The keyboard patch at the start is a tad too loud.

Guitar... played well. Too much distortion for me however. Just back off a tiny bit.

Vocals.... perfect for this. I'm not crazy about your reverb, but that is a personal taste.

All in all.... excellent.



BTW... I sent you a friend request at Soundclick. If you get the chance please check out a song I have on my website from a couple of years ago called "Welcome Home". It is my tribute to the friends I left behind.
Steve