Critique wanted for new song...

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Looking for critics of a song I wrote tonite. Go to http://www.garageband.com/song?|pe1|S8LTM0LdsaSnYVm2ZmE

Its called "Not For You". It was recorded with a computer mic so I realise the production is a bit weak, the vox are quite low in the mix - its a demo but good enough to get the idea across!
Please post any comments (good or bad!) in this thread.

- Neill
 
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Any comments are appreciated?LOL.OK,The vocal sounds like you were standing on the corner about 3 blocks from your house with a microphone hanging out the window of your 5 story apartment building recording it.lmao!

The whole thing sounds really muddy.The guitar is boomy with no defintion......thats about all I can tell you man.LOL....there isnt much of a melody to keep me interested either.

Maybe some of the mixing gurus will give you a listen and point you in the right direction on getting the mix a little better.
 
Well if you'd read what I said about the recording of it you'd understand the mixing problems. The vox and guitar were recorded simitaneuosly with one mic which may also explain the problem. But like I said comments on the song itself please, not the production.

- Neill
 
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But like I said comments on the song itself please, not the production.
- Neill
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Oh ok,My bad.I did comment on the song though.It has absolutely nothing about it that makes me wanna listen to it.It has no hook,no melody etc........not much to it as far as the song goes........has no form and is really disjointed from start to finish.


Maybe if I could actually "hear" the vocal I would hear the melody.
 
Strat Man,

My overall impression is positive. The verse is pretty good. I can imagine a nice drum groove playing off that catchy acoustic guitar part there. Critique would be that it lacks definition, partly because of the "sketch" nature of the production. I might go somewhere else in the bridge, (maybe move it up a full step?) as a possible alternative.

Nice work, tho :)
 
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I would comment if I could hear the song....

It sounds exactly like a song recorded with a computer mic..so ahh, no suprises I guess. I would think a better spot for that soundblaster mic could be found. Closer to your mouth...vocals are king.
 
Its actually a laptop mic so had to put the computer at mouth level but had to keep it at a distance as the guitar caused it to distort when placed too close.
 
Sound good to me!

Given the rough sketch nature of the song, and the limitations mentioned, I think it sounds great and has a lot of potential. I am not so concerned about hooks, bridges, and other things that are characteristicly thought of as important in songs. Bob Dylan didn't meet any of the typical criteria of his time, but his music was quite captivating in it's own way..

It feels like a genuine expression of you, which is what I think matters most. To the extent that you feel that what is inside you is being released, is the extent that you should feel successful. Keep that attitude as you seek to fill this song out and make it complete!
 
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