Here's my opinion about your track. Please remember I'm trying to be helpful.
Your lyrics sound good but are difficult to comprehend. The phrases you've pushed together don't make sense. Your first verse is:
There’s something in your eyes,
Every time I see its ok
Every single time I know that you will be by my side
And I know that it will be the same way
Hoping for the rest of my life!
You speak of seeing something (perhaps an emotion?) in someone's eyes. What is this thing that happens every time you see it's ok? I don't follow your meaning. The problem is that you are being quite vague about many things. "There's something", "its ok", "it will be" all refer to unknown emotions/actions/objects. On top of this, the last two lines are gramatically confused. "It will be the same way hoping for the rest..." doesn't make sense. Perhaps you mean "I hope it will be this way for the rest of my life".
The rest of your lyrics suffer from similar flaws. You might consider posting your lyrics first in the forum, getting help in perfecting them, and then recording your song.
Musically, you have an interesting start but the piano line and drums remain unchanging. Frankly, after a while I found myself hoping the piano would just stop. Perhaps you should use some dynamic changes if you must keep the backing lines the same. Something needs to provide more balance or drama to your mix.
I wish you much success in your songwriting, you have a promising start. Please accept my comments as my attempt to be helpful, not hurtful.
