Cathy's song (my wife)

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A song I wrote my Wife (not my first marriage)just about the time we were getting married. I did a recording of it when I was first getting into digital recording a year ago,but I wasnt very happy with it so I did not post it. I know it needs a rework, she deserves better, but I have not had the time to do it.
Maybe someone can give me some objective pointers on what to work on. IMHO the guitar is thin and too bright... drums sound fake too, same old vocal problem with lack of talent. all suggestions welcome

led me to you

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=1644&alid=-1

Peace
Bill
 
Regardless of production, I always look for the song first. That leads me to having less stuff to really get into from the top 40, or anything else. I'm having a hard time hearing your lyrics. You say you may not be satisfied w/ your vocal quality, but it doesn't matter to me if vocalists can sing as long as I get the lyric. You are in tune and i hear the melody, but I think maybe you mixed or recorded vocal w too much effects? The tune does move along ok. Others can say more on production/mix. I do solo acoustic, so far....
 
That sounds much better thatn the 1st post. The guitar sounds open and more natural. The singing is fine man, you can`t hear yourself like someone else does so your often overly critical. It`s ok, I wouldnt even use that much reverb on it. Now for drums, I just dont hear 'em, Not that the piece even really needs any. This song could easily get you a couple a days off to do what you want, after you play it for your wife. :)
 
Toki: You couldnt hear the drums? I thought they were too loud must have opened the wrong song.
Led me to you

Junplugged: Im getting a little bolder with the vocals Im doing now. Ill Definitely cool the effects some and boost the vocals from now on. when I redo it Ill repost it as well.


peace Bill
 
your right~~ hahaha. I was listening to another one. Well, I still say the same thing, the singing is pretty darn good to me, Id like it without the effects though. The tambourine needs to be moved back with the drums a little, and back the drums off a tad. The drum line is good too. More bass? :)
 
I agree with the dudes above. nuttin wrong with your vox. Just can't hear the lyrics very well, even with my cans on. Were you using Chorus on your vox?

I could hear the drums but it seemed they were not in the right place. Like they were spread from side to side. But at least the beat fit the toon.

Guitar playing was pretty good but too much chorus, IMHO. If there is a bass in there, it's just barely there.

This toon has alot going for it as far as melody, lyrical content and storyline. I can tell it comes from the heart. If it were me, I would start over on it maybe just leaving the guitar as a scratch track to go by.

CR ><>
 
i'm not crazy about the DI sounding guitar......maybe try micing it.......
as for the vocals...the melody sounds good, but the words don't cut through....are you using a condensor mic? if not, you should look into getting one.......

it's a good song.....a little more work, and i think you'll like how it ends up
 
Axe4Yahweh and powderfinger, thanks for the input. Im going to try to sing it without covering it up when I rerecord it. Theres no bass, and Im working on getting a good recorded acoustic sound. Ive got a thread going with some acoustic samples and a poll I just posted on the mp3 clinic. If youve got time let me know where I need to take the acoustic guitar sound.
 
Everything has pretty much been covered. ENJOYED IT THOUGH.
Joe
 
Hey Bill,

I iked the git sound alot. I think it would prosper from some overdubing, panning same track to the opposite side and going for more of a wall of acoustic sound in general. I dig the approach.........always ready to be inspired by someone elses take on things ( for me, this is a case in point):D

The vox track is soooooooo wet it wishes it could drowd itself!!

If it is a matter of personal preferance, change your mind.
If it is a matter of personal confidence, try some reverb methadone and dup the vox track with one wet (like this but drier) and one full on dry. Blend them till you get your verb high but don't kill the track with effect mud.........Just a simpleton thought from an equivelant mind.:) :)


Plenty O' Potential with this one.
Make it shine!!

Peace and progress,

Theron.
 
Theron; Thanks for the reply. I thought I had already been courageous in posting this at all. Believe it or not, I already took a bunch of mud off the vox. Its interesting on how we can't judge our own mixes very well. I mean I know that this needs to be redone, and Ive learned a lot in the last several months from all the folks here. I can now see where I need to go with it.
I would like to clean the guitar track up so it sounds like a live acoustic rather than a DI overprocessed as it is now. Im working on getting that guitar sound down. theres a thread here in the mp3 clinic with some samples and a poll which isnt getting much response right now. Ive been trying to overcome all the usual obstacles a newbie runs into, one at a time.
Ill probably keep the original drum track since it was Soooo much work to get timed with the song. Ive been privately playing with panning and double tracking and you are correct this adds a lot when applied correctly but makes a mess as well at times.
Your comments are appreciated.
Sorry to hear about your old boss/job situation. I hope all works out for you. Sometimes taking a break and getting all your priorities back in order is the best thing that can happen.
Its kind of like the words to this song.
We dont realize how the twists and turns in life which seem like bummers can be used to better make us who we need to be and teach us what we need to learn. Its all leading us somewhere and/or to someone.

Peace
Bill
 
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