Captain Ticklesme Weirdly

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Holy shit! This is fucking awesome! I love it. The intro was great, and the actual song is great. The mix sounds really good and the drum track sounds awesome. Great job.
 
Thank you so much. I didn't really expect that reaction. When the cuss words fly, I know I've done good. Thanks for the F-bomb, and likewisefor the S-rocket.
 
Is that a banjo or a keyboard?
You really do seem, in certain parts of this, to be a Nilsson dopleganger - that's a good thing in my book.
Nice twists in the narrative.
Snare's a bit annoying after a while.
Good work, enjoyable.
 
It is a keyboard banjo, I guess. lol. What is wrong with the snare if I may ask? And, who is this Nilsson that you keep telling me I am like (I think you have said it before) and what brings you to that conclusion? I am just curious.
 
That was pretty freaking sweet.

Nothing jumped out at me as out of place on a first listen, but that may be just because I was distracted by the awesome lyrics.

I like the intro. It was about 1 step from being a Helloween song, which is pretty cool.

Now I wanna be a clown when I grow up.
 
Thanks vomithat. I am glad you like my lyrics. It is also pretty funny you say it sounds like a halloween song at the first, because when I want to write a halloween song, I can't do it for my life! Have fun with your new career too by the way!:D
 
Awe-fucking-some!!! Beatle-ish, Nilsson-ish.....But totally original.


Unicyclist: Anita Notherwheel!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! Classic.

By the way, Nilsson's most popular tune is "Lime in the Coconut", but he has many other great ones too.
 
The snare seems too loud.
Harry Nilsson - best know for mega hit Without You was a prolific songwriter with an excellent but fairly idiosyncratic sense of melody.
His delivery was unique as well & was as quirky as hell beneath the lush arrangements and ballads.
Spaceman, Lottery Song, The entire Nilsson Sings Newman, I'd rather Be Dead (Than Wet My Bed) are things you should listen to as well as the LPs Ariel Ballet & Pandamonium Shadow Show, Early Works and Nilsson.
You occasionally sound like him from a melodic and delivery point.
 
RAMI said:
Awe-fucking-some!!! Beatle-ish, Nilsson-ish.....But totally original.


Unicyclist: Anita Notherwheel!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! Classic.

By the way, Nilsson's most popular tune is "Lime in the Coconut", but he has many other great ones too.
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YES! Somebody but me actually got the unicycle joke! lol. Thank for the great comment!
 
You always make me realize that I take my music too seriously.

This is a good thing. I always look forward to your stuff.
 
bozmillar said:
You always make me realize that I take my music too seriously.

This is a good thing. I always look forward to your stuff.
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Thank you so much. But I must point out, I do take my music seriously, even though the subject matter may not be very serious. It really means a lot that you "look foward" to my stuff. I am glad you like it, and I thank you very much for your comment! THANKS!
 
Lots of people love it and this isn't necessarily a style I enjoy so obviously take my opinion with a grain of salt but I figure since I have some constructive things to say I'll be honest...


1) The snare sounds good but I think it's too loud and it sounds MIDI because of the lack of variation between hits. Try humanizing it? The vocal also is a tad loud, maybe it's just that the acoustic or some other instrument needs to come up?

2) When lyrics get crammed together and have to be said real quick I usually think they should have been re-written to be more concise. And they usually can be. And they usually sound better when they are, both because of better lyric writing but also because it lends itself better to melodies. "He's that creepy old guy you don't want hanging out with your kids" is an example of a line that doesn't sound very well written to me, the lack of rhythm variation and rhyme scheme may contribute to that feeling considering the catchy uptempo feel of the song. But simply singing it as "the creepy guy you don't want hanging with your kids" with more of a swinging rhythm would sound a lot better to me. Similar with the word "episode." Could that just be "show" instead? "frightened" could be "scared." etc.

3) "He's got THAT kids show on tv" sounds funny to me, awkward emphasis and rhythm on THAT, an unimportant word. I would sing "got" on the downbeat, leave a pause, and sing "that" on beat 2. So straight quarter notes.

Sorry if you were just looking for mixing feedback. My two cents. Musically I LOVE the bridge. Very Beatles.
 
corban said:
Lots of people love it and this isn't necessarily a style I enjoy so obviously take my opinion with a grain of salt but I figure since I have some constructive things to say I'll be honest...


1) The snare sounds good but I think it's too loud and it sounds MIDI because of the lack of variation between hits. Try humanizing it? The vocal also is a tad loud, maybe it's just that the acoustic or some other instrument needs to come up?

2) When lyrics get crammed together and have to be said real quick I usually think they should have been re-written to be more concise. And they usually can be. And they usually sound better when they are, both because of better lyric writing but also because it lends itself better to melodies. "He's that creepy old guy you don't want hanging out with your kids" is an example of a line that doesn't sound very well written to me, the lack of rhythm variation and rhyme scheme may contribute to that feeling considering the catchy uptempo feel of the song. But simply singing it as "the creepy guy you don't want hanging with your kids" with more of a swinging rhythm would sound a lot better to me. Similar with the word "episode." Could that just be "show" instead? "frightened" could be "scared." etc.

3) "He's got THAT kids show on tv" sounds funny to me, awkward emphasis and rhythm on THAT, an unimportant word. I would sing "got" on the downbeat, leave a pause, and sing "that" on beat 2. So straight quarter notes.

Sorry if you were just looking for mixing feedback. My two cents. Musically I LOVE the bridge. Very Beatles.
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Thanks for the comments. I will respond as well as I can. I like the way it came out, so it isn't very likely that I will change the mix, or the phrasing. When I write a lyric, the way I sing it, and the way it is phrased, and what inflections go where are what I think is good for the song. I write as I play the guitar or piano or whatever, and usualy the melody comes along with the words, and the way I sing them stays the same from then to recording, if I like the way it sound. I don't pay to much attention on the kind of math of timing lyrics, and phrasing and emphasis and that kind of thing. I just do what feel natral to me, and go with what I think sounds cool. I do mixing the same way, and really at the end of the day, I am trying to please myself, and if others like it, it makes it that much better. Thanks again for the comment, and taking the time to listen!:D
 
Careful Props - your last response was Jordanesque :p
You already know I really like your stuff but...
You should attempt a few of the suggestions made in terms of mix & balance - just to see how they'd go - the idea is to learn as well as get back pats.
I think your phrasing is usually pretty good & has its own "thang" going on but rewrites can be useful and redoing a vocal or instrumental track (in a non desctructive format so you don't ditch the original) can be a good thing on occasion.
If you haven't dropped into Jordan Land (the MONO to stereo thread in the equip. section somewhere) you'll find a truly edifying example of someone who seeks reinforcement/exposure, (yet not being cogniscent that the exposure is of the growing up in public ilk), but brooks no suggestion of change rework, improvement, rewrite or remix.
 
very cool conceptually.....


drums sound sort of midi....if they are..they are programmed really well....
acoustic guit sounds buried in the mix....
bass sits good to my ears but,....my ears are permanently fried when it comes to lows....
Vox sounds great...harmony vox sits a little low in the mix to me.....
banjo? wow...very cool....

good job in the creativity department man.....it's not often that something appears "different" to me....very cool.
 
rayc said:
Careful Props - your last response was Jordanesque :p
You already know I really like your stuff but...
You should attempt a few of the suggestions made in terms of mix & balance - just to see how they'd go - the idea is to learn as well as get back pats.
I think your phrasing is usually pretty good & has its own "thang" going on but rewrites can be useful and redoing a vocal or instrumental track (in a non desctructive format so you don't ditch the original) can be a good thing on occasion.
If you haven't dropped into Jordan Land (the MONO to stereo thread in the equip. section somewhere) you'll find a truly edifying example of someone who seeks reinforcement/exposure, (yet not being cogniscent that the exposure is of the growing up in public ilk), but brooks no suggestion of change rework, improvement, rewrite or remix.
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No I have not heard of Jordan. You have to understand something about me though. It comes down to two things. One, I am a lazy person.:D Two, I do remix things sometimes, but I have this weird thing where I think If I screw around with things too much, it will take away what I was originally trying to put there. I know that sounds kind of weird, and it is a bad habbit, but it is just something I do. I couldn't tell you why. I never rewrite words. Most of the time I am trying to convey something with the way it was worded, or I think it sounds cool. I just want you to understand badly that I am not trying to be a jerk or anything, and I do take every comment that comes by with great respect, and most of the time I agree 100 percent, and it isn't an ego thing at all. I just fear to mess with things. I know very well that I don't know everything, and I am sorry if I came off as disrespecting anybody.
 
propman said:
No I have not heard of Jordan. You have to understand something about me though. It comes down to two things. One, I am a lazy person.:D Two, I do remix things sometimes, but I have this weird thing where I think If I screw around with things too much, it will take away what I was originally trying to put there. I know that sounds kind of weird, and it is a bad habbit, but it is just something I do. I couldn't tell you why. I never rewrite words. Most of the time I am trying to convey something with the way it was worded, or I think it sounds cool. I just want you to understand badly that I am not trying to be a jerk or anything, and I do take every comment that comes by with great respect, and most of the time I agree 100 percent, and it isn't an ego thing at all. I just fear to mess with things. I know very well that I don't know everything, and I am sorry if I came off as disrespecting anybody.
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No you're definitely not disrespectful. Rayc is just pointing to an extreme example of somebody who isn't willing to improve his music based on feedback from people who know what they're talking about.

It really just comes down to how much you're willing to put into making your music better. I used to have a similar idea to you... like the original inspiration for my songs was what I needed to stay true to, because that was the genius of it right there, anything additional would just be making it worse. But now that I've worked with various songwriters and producers I admire greatly, I've just come to realize that the best music comes from being willing to put the hard work in on improving it. Change and tweak things for the better as you get feedback on them, not getting too attached to the way you're used to hearing it, because your opinion as the composer is somewhat biased. I'll tell you this as a fact: your song could use improvement, so tweaking it isn't going to make it worse. After all, you can always go back to the way it was. However, you're not obligated to make it better if you don't want to put the work in or change your original inspiration, and I'm not offended if that's the case. If you like the way it sounds, and your music is just for you, good on ya.
 
corban said:
No you're definitely not disrespectful. Rayc is just pointing to an extreme example of somebody who isn't willing to improve his music based on feedback from people who know what they're talking about.

It really just comes down to how much you're willing to put into making your music better. I used to have a similar idea to you... like the original inspiration for my songs was what I needed to stay true to, because that was the genius of it right there, anything additional would just be making it worse. But now that I've worked with various songwriters and producers I admire greatly, I've just come to realize that the best music comes from being willing to put the hard work in on improving it. Change and tweak things for the better as you get feedback on them, not getting too attached to the way you're used to hearing it, because your opinion as the composer is somewhat biased. I'll tell you this as a fact: your song could use improvement, so tweaking it isn't going to make it worse. After all, you can always go back to the way it was. However, you're not obligated to make it better if you don't want to put the work in or change your original inspiration, and I'm not offended if that's the case. If you like the way it sounds, and your music is just for you, good on ya.
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I may have worded it a bit badly when I said it was JUST for me. If that was the case, I wouldn't put it here at all. More or less, I guess I write what I think would be good, and not what I think other people would. I think everybody does that. But if I love what I have done, I want everybody to hear it. I am not a pompous ass, and I never want to be so if I start going in that direction, point it out. Thanks.
 
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