Can't get lyrics to my Chorus

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I am writin a cool tune, at least to say that I have a good (common progression) with lyrics and a good backbeat. the problem is that I can't get a chorus for the song. The song is about a girl ...well you see for yourself. Then I will fell you in on the details after the lyrics.

Verse1:
She starts her day just like all the rest
But she's distracted by her thoughts of being alone
'Cause she's still chasing the man that wasn't there for her
That left with a child that he's never known

Bridge?:
She wonders what went wrong
Doesn't know where she belongs...

Chorus:????

Any help? I'm drawing a blank, and not sure that if it's because I 'm trying to get a melody from the progression in the chorus first..to let the feeling com out...or because I just can't think about how that it's going to relate to the 2nd verse where "she" meets guy that is worht her time...
Any advice would help, thanks in advance.

GUNS
 
the chorus is supposed to be the part of the song where your whole point takes place and then the verse leads up to it....try writing the chorus first next time, then youll know what you are leading up to.....
 
Try changing the bridge after that first verse to something like

And she wonders when she might find
The one who blah blah blah blee

and then go into the chorus


and then write your second verse where she finds him and the bridge to the second verse can be

And now she knows she found
the one who blah blah blah blee

that would make the chorus be about the type of guy shes looking for but then youd have to "still chasin" to "through chasing" in the first verse.......
 
This board is pissin' me off..Lets see if I can get it to post now!

She starts her day like all the rest..
Distracted by the thought of bein' alone..
Cause shes chasein' the father
Of the child he's never known..

Bridge..
She skinned her knees..{referance to prayer}
And I thought I heard her say..

Chorus..
Gimme a moment
to find some space
Gimme a moment
Gotta find that face
Gimme a moment
I'm runnin' the race
Just gimme one clear moment

Dammit what I had was better..But I lost it !!!!!!!!!!SH*T..Well I tried to tighten up the verse for you..Hope that I was able to help some

Don
 
I like it Don...here's mine,

CHORUS
Abandoned, without a thought
Abandoned, hard lessons taught
Abandoned, who's to blame
Abandoned, it's a cryin' shame...

Verse 2
???????
 
Its hard for me to reply since Im not sure the Genre...I mean if its country..thats one things..But if its Nu-Metal, Im gonna say something entirely different..I listened to Disturbed's Down with the Sickness and I like it...Or if its a rap tune it gets even better... P.O.D. has some cool things happening...

I might go into a 2nd verse, repeat the pre chorus and then the chorus, find something positive to say about the working moms in this world.

Find another day,
Doing the best that you know
Love will find away,

Find another day,
Giving your child hope,
Love will find a way,

Find another day,


start verse 3

Peace,
Dennis
 
Thanks everyone for the other side

Thanks for the post...I know a lot of times is better to have two heads brainstorming to get to where the one mind has an idea of where he or she wants it to go. I will definatley use your info on it.

Do anyone of you have a certain routine that works best for you in terms of writing. Like the steps that most of your material was written or is soon to be.

Thanks
GUNS
 
GUNS,

Gidge's original suggestion is right on the money.
John Mellencamp (or was it Mike Green?) once said, "Every chorus should be written as if it were preceeded by the words, '. . . and that's why I say . . .'"
Decide where you're going, FIRST - then write verses that lead there.
 
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