"Bitch's Paradox"

[Seafroggys]

Don't think I've posted in this forum before....anyway, I'm a promiscuous songwriter. I wrote music out for a song yesterday, needed lyrics today, decided to write about a breakup I had awhile ago, since I hadn't written a song about that event. Anyway, I know some people don't like using the word "bitch" in their songs, but hopefully anybody who may be offended can look past that

Splitting our distance like splitting the atom
Oh you'd think our hearts would grow
If not for tipping the scales
in the games of honesty

I saw her felt her loved her
But I was caught in the bitch's paradox

Opening a heart is not a joy for one
But she gave her reasons for falsified tales
She told me that she wanted to be alone
So I turn away, and what does she say?

"Here's a man who can dance with me
Ah-oh! Fits me in a general gender role
I'm a feminist, but he's older and richer
Fuck our ideals ohhhhhhh"

(solos)

She saw him felt him loved him
And I was caught in the bitch's paradox

I am me have always been me
With or without her, you can't change that
But changing her it only takes
A swinging dance and a cowboy hat

Ha! If there is hell the jokes' on her
It's her rules, her paradox

(solo)

 

[gecko zzed]

Ah . . . another bitter breakup song . . . just what the world needs!

But . . . as I read on . . . I reckon you've done a damn fine job here. You've managed to deal with a common theme with considerable originality.

There are some fine lines here:
"if not for tipping the scales/in the games of honesty"
"but I was caught in the Bitch's Paradox"
"But changing her it only takes/a swinging dance and a cowboy hat"

These are clever, new, and roll off the tongue very well.

You wondered about using the word 'bitch'. It doesn't worry me . . . and the idea of a "Bitch's Paradox" is neat.

I am more concerned with "Fuck our ideals ohhhh", not because of using the word 'fuck' as such, but because its use in the line actually, in my view, detracts from the power of that line, when you would normally expect it to add emphasis to an emotion. However, I am making this comment without the benefit of the music . . . it may work better in context.

 

[Seafroggys]

Yeah I know...you can almost hear the slide guitar and the Dixie Chick's voice already....!

Heh, yeah. The music is pretty sweet, I should upload the midi of it soon (almost done with it) pretty sweet minor/diminished chord stuff, upbeat riffy rock music.

Not sure what I could do instead of "Fuck our ideals" it goes along with a descending chord pattern though.....

 

[gecko zzed]

WHat the line is saying us (they way I read it), "aah, the sweet bitter taste of hypocrisy" . . . and I'd be thinking of saying that or something similar.