Between Sun And Fall , be honnest =)

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I like the song and the mood and the lyric. Real John Lennon thing.
If I were to change anything, if it were mine:

Reduce level of electric solo guitar radically...think U2....way in the background with a lot of delay..a support, instead of a feature;

Kill off the chorus FX soon after the intro. The vocal will stand on its own with a pleasant rawness...like Lennon's; and lower the levels of the FX where used later for textural contrast...which the tune needs because of the long length of the various parts.

The second cycle screams for drums and bass or synth strings...something new...without which the tune becomes fatiguing because it's very predictable in arrangement and sound. Too few surprises...think the drum intro on "Stairway to Heaven". A real good lesson in construction of build-up and maintaining a listener's interested ear, I think.

I like the song a lot. I like the way you sing it. Nice , evocative feel.

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i like i too, but i think it lacks any punch. Maybe drums or some sort of percussion would make it more interesting to listen to. I'm also not a fan of the over use of fx in recording in general, but i think the way you've used the the fx are interesting and artistic. totally dig it. cool stuff, but i'd add in a shaker or tambourine or simple drums, just to have something else fill in some space.
 
thank you all, I cant believe someone actually compared me to lennon, I never heard that before! =D you both right about the FX thing I used, excuse me, Ive abandoned composing for 3 years cause I was busy doing some Trance/D&B and some other experimental/ambient tracks, maybe thats why my ear is used to have FX on almost every song I record
 
I definitely feel like the lead vocal could come up a good bit. And yeah... it could use some body later on in the song.

But very good, just the same. Props.
 
I like it, very original sound. I wouldn't necessarily take the effects off, etc.

For my own taste (and that's all it is), I agree in general that I'd bring the vocals up a bit, and push the guitar back a bit (specifically the "lead" electric).

I don't think it *needs* it, but I also agree that adding some other rhythmic/harmonic element in the second half would add to it.

All in all, I like it a lot.
 
yeah, I guess I could take the lead electric back a bit, I recently noticed that my monitors (behringer b2031p) has too much color when playing high frequency sounds
but like every other artist im afraid to make too much of a change and than itll ruin my unique sound, hope ill get it right =D
 
Nice. Real smooth, lush feel. Great topic lyric wise.
Some sort of drum. Something ethnic would be cool.

Good tune. Thanks!
Matty
 
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