At a stand still ...

[treb311]

I get good feedback for my lyrics which i think is cool as i think my lyrics arent good, but ANYWAY

i took a new approach to writing lyrics and came up with this ... please take the time to tell me if it worked or not

Breathe as the ball drops down
Intaking the air filled with flaw
As 1 is displayed more time is wasted
But the joy is healing as the earth ticks

Decide to march or make a change
Time is slow, but it's there to rearrange
Silently / Abrupt / Loud or nothing at all
Everything stays the same somehow

Awake . Awake . The light dims
Alive . Strive For a new day
Alive for the next cycle

The earth creates time

 

[yiordanaki]

hey treb,

very deep meaningful lyrics. i like it.

Id also like to see how you would set them to music.
It definitely seems to me like a spoken poem. Which you say with a deep slow voice and all drugged out hippies are around going -- yeeeaaahh - you got it man.

but seriously - that sounds great - if you can make it fit nicely to a tune...

yiordanaki

btw what was your new writing approach?

 

[zer0sig]

i would just basically repeat what yiordanaki said if i were to write out a comment, so i will just add a "me too" to reflect that i did read it and feel the same.