Asking for review on my song - "Alone"

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hi there everyone.

I Just wanted to ask for review on my song, Just posted this exact thread in other section and was sent here, so apollogies for doble posting... don't know how to erase the other one.

So, A little about it. I wrote the music for the song and my singer wrote the lyrics.

The song was recorded at my home with my notebook, POD X3 Live as sound procesing and input, Adobe audition 3 for software.

Drums: EZDrummer (I did the Midi programing)
Guitars: the three of them were recorded with my CORT M200 with EMG89 Pickup. All comming through diferent signal chains with POD X3 Live.
Bass: 4Front Bass VSTi Plugin (I did the Midi programing)
Voice: my singer did the singing (or at least tried :rolleyes:). Recorded in my living room with Shure SM58 Mic through signal chain in POD X3 Live. Chorus, reberb and Echo effects added in Adobe Audition standard effects.

Mixing and EQ done by me .

If anyone want's to know what is in each signal chain do ask. I don't remember all of it, but i can check.

So if you read all of the above you understand that this is not Profesional recording. But I did my best with what I have and tried to be as profesional as I could. I know there is still work to be done with the voice (and probably the other stuff as well), but I wanted your opinion anyway.

So, any comment is welcome, either about the song itself, the recording, the mixing, or the use of effects and such.

Thanks in advance to all!

Fede
 

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Hi Fede,

There's a lot I like about this: the song itself, the shaky vocals, the ambitious use of effects on the vocals. Good job. But, as I think you know, there are a few issues here! First thing that struck was those intro cymbals - way too loud (you cant get away with that level when they're not real). Second was the effects on the vocals - the ideas are spot on but you've over cooked them a bit - more subtle would be good. Then, there's the pop shield thing. You don't actually have to buy a pop shield. Get a wire coat hanger, bend it into a diamond shape and pull a pair of tights over it. Keep it 2 inches from the mic and keep your vocalist 4 inches from it and you will not get those pffffs on the mike. Keep trying, keep making mistakes, and keep getting better.
 
Thanks for you comments. I think i will have to buy a pop filter and re-do the vocals. I did try to take all that away with EQ and filters but they didn't go away.

As for the Intro cymbals i'll try and turn them down to see if I can make them more believable.

As for the vocal effects, I'll play a little more with it to see what i can do after i re-do the voice.

Thanx again.

Fede
 
I think you need to go back to the mixing drawing board, brother. You got a cool tune here, but things are so off that it's no where near something I would consider to even be a quality DEMO. Not trying to sound too harsh or anything, but some parts are too harsh on the ears. Just remember with a lot more hard work you can end up with amazing results.

EzDrummer can be made to sound amazing, you're average person won't be able to tell it's not a real drummer, but on this song it sounds just like EzDrummer out of the box, which isn't very good sounding. So, you might want to start there and experiment with that ALOT lol. And yes, please redo the vocals until they are perfect because it was kind of hard to sit through the parts that were just too harsh on the ears.
 
Hi Fede

You need to do some serious work on the MIDI drumming... as FP above opines, it's straight out of the box and sounds like a cardboard box as well... light and shade, subtle variations... all easy enough to do.

I think you have the basics of a good song there, but the mix is pretty hit and miss. Vocals jump out too much in places and the guitars sound over-processed and lifeless - I'd really try to mic up an actual amp if I were you, easier way to give them a bit more oomph...

Good luck...
 
In general I would reduce your use of effects. It's tough to understand the lyrics in many spots. There is lots of reverb/delay and such that covers the original vocal. Put the mix up for a week and come back to it. See if you still like it.

Also pay attention to the original tracks. Listen to the "talk to me" at :47. There is a plosive or some sort of burst of sound that is really distracting. It sounds like it's copied and pasted elsewhere.

I kind of like that heavy distorted guitar sound playing those power chords in a few sections.
 
Thank you all for your comments.

I have a list of things to do now... First of all, "buy a pop filter". 2nd. Redo the voice. 3rd loosen on the voice effects. I think most of your complaints are about the voice and yes I do realize it is not good. As for the effects I am still convinced that i want them. It's reberb+A big chorus on the main part and A lot of reberb and Echo on the Chorus. BUT i will take your advice and use them more subtely

as for the drums. I will go back to that and retouch most of it. Other than the opening cymbals I will try to see in detail all the other parts to try and make it more believable.

so , special comments:
FoulPhil: you said "EzDrummer can be made to sound amazing, you're average person won't be able to tell it's not a real drummer, but on this song it sounds just like EzDrummer out of the box, which isn't very good sounding" . Other than the intro cymbals. Can you point me in the general direction as to where to start making adjustments. You are right. It is used out of the box, but I don't fully understand what you mean.

Armstice. Same as FP. I'll try and make some subtle changes on the drums to see if I can make these changes. I don't really understand what you mean about the guitars. I actually like them. Perhaps there is a track I would like to redo, but that is it. It is complicated for me to try and experiment on mics on the actual amp simply because I don't have them and i can't get my hands on them, so I'll try and play with all of it and give them a little more "life".

TripleM : I can asure you there is no copy paste of the vocals anywhere. I can say that proudly. But it does sound as bad as everybody already said. So off to redo vocals. As for the effects, I still believe that i want them there, but i will try and make them more subtle, or get better effects to make it sound a little better.

Thanks all for you comments and help. ! ! ! ! ! !

Fede
 
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