Angsty rock song - Yertle's View

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I just finished a couple of new songs.

Here's one of them.

As always opinions and constructive criticism are welcome.

(click the title of the song to access the mp3 itself)
 
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Steve, You made me relive all my angst of being passed over for that promotion - thanks a million! Just kidding.... Good topic for a song so true to life. I found the vocals a little soft on the verses but good in the chorus. Love the power lift in the chorus - this is the second song I've heard this week that had that effect (see RayC's latest)... Ending is real good with the soft then loud then repeats... "I give it an 83 Dick Clark, I really dig the beat!" :cool:
 
Interesting vibe. It kind of reminds me of old Marcy Playground. I really like it. Now, on to the technical stuff. The guitars are buried under the vocals. In a way, it's almost like you intended it to be that way. I do think they could come up a bit, though. The whole song has a sedating quality to it. Maybe it's because the song itself is really mellow. That's okay, though. I have to say that I did play along with it since you posted the lyrics and chords. It was fun.
 
Thank you.

Yeah, I had a lot of trouble getting the vocals balanced right throughout this song. Maybe I need to compress them flatter. :D

I believe that tablature in the album liner notes is the next logical step from lyrics in the liner notes!
 
One of my favorite Seuss books (2nd only to "If I Ran the Circus")! Cool tune. I don't agree with the guitars being buried by the vox. I think if anything, it's the other way around (with regards to the lead guitar - upon 2nd listen, I hear there is a rhythm pretty darn low in the mix). Well, it sorta depends on the part of the song. In some places you can barely hear the words. Others are alright.

I think there is a lot of low and low mid energy that could be cleaned up to open up the song as a whole, which would make the vox and guitar stand out maybe better.

This seems like a definite case of a song that could be improved by defining/isolating a core EQ range for each major track and minimizing the overlaps.

On an unrelated note, if you stream the song (left click), you are redirected away from the page with the lyrics, which is kind of a bummer, if you want to read along. If it's possible to get the mp3 to open in another window that might be better.

Cool tune, though!
 
I think I broke the internet. I couldn't get the page to load?
 
andyhix - Yeah, I'm not very good at eq yet. It's one of those things I just started trying to apply to my mixes a few weeks ago. Hopefully future results will be better! Good idea with the opening in different windows idea. I'll look into that.

Chrisharris - Hmmm... I'm not sure what to tell you. It worked last time I checked, but my host has been know to arbitrarily stop serving my pages at times.
 
Good song Steve. I like the chorus hookline. Drums sound a bit weak to me and the voice in the verse could come up a bit. Great lyrics!

Cheers
Joe
 
Hey Man....

Good song. Yup, bring the vocals up a little in the verses. Maybe back off a little on the doubling effect. The synth during the bridge is too close in freq with the guitars, you can try to find some separation there.

Love the lyrics. I like the outtro. Good vibe all around.

Cool man.
 
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