Alexandria....

  • Thread starter Thread starter queepy
  • Start date Start date
queepy

queepy

aka Variaxman
A friend of mine wrote this poem and asked if we could try and put it to music.....now you all know my struggle with vocals :rolleyes: ...but I'm kinda digging how this one is coming along....1st time Ive tried doing "ooohhhs" and "aahhhs" in the chorus...worked kinda hard on the bass guitar on this as well and tried not to play just root/5th all the time :p , but kinda "walk" it around...
I know it's kinda long ,I guess it's my prog rock side showing, but would appreciate any feedback from those that can sit thru it... ;) ...
Thanks!!


Alexandria - Streaming

Alexandria -download *warning* large file!
 
Nice bass tone....I like that. Vocals could be drier...just knock the verb down a little bit. They soumd a bit like they are in a hall, or tunnel....tune it down, until it sounds a bit more natural. The performance seems good, so let it be more natural. Makr it to where you can't really tell there is verb...that will probably do this tune well. Or, use a chorus or delay instead of verb...lightly, just for a doubling effect. (tiny bit..)

The music sounds just fine...mixed together well..and that bass is good...really carries that part of the song. Nice leads....fit well, and add to the song. The OOoohs sound good....they are sort of dreamy....leave that part. Just dry up the main vocal a little. ;)
 
I agree with Dogman, the vocals are too wet. Everything else sounds very good, nice and clear. The ooh and aah stuff actually sounds pretty cool. The lead vox will sound more focused if you kill the reverb. The song is very good, nice solos. :cool:
 
Yeah the bass sounds great. Wish I could get bass to sound that good. The vocals are generally good, but yeah too much verb. I like the oooohs - reminds me of Bowie forsome reason. Nice melodies
 
The main vocals are a bit low and have more reverb than the instruments making them hard to distinguish in parts... Ooohs are really cool....

Solo(s) have a great tone, good for this style of tune.

Bass guitar sounds good - I like what you're doing there.

Cool tune - working from the lyrics can be fun.... I think you've written a great song together...


:) :D :) :D
 
Dogman : Nice bass tone....I like that. Vocals could be drier...just knock the verb down a little bit. They sound a bit like they are in a hall, or tunnel....tune it down, until it sounds a bit more natural. The performance seems good, so let it be more natural. Makr it to where you can't really tell there is verb...that will probably do this tune well. Or, use a chorus or delay instead of verb...lightly, just for a doubling effect. (tiny bit..)

The music sounds just fine...mixed together well..and that bass is good...really carries that part of the song. Nice leads....fit well, and add to the song. The OOoohs sound good....they are sort of dreamy....leave that part. Just dry up the main vocal a little.
Click to expand...

Dogman, I just took the verb off of my mix on the vox and it does sound better....thanks for the comment on the bass...I'm finally starting to get close to the bass guitar tone I've been trying for ....gonna post a new verb less vocal mic this afternoon...thanks for your comments...always appreciate them greatly!


DavidK : I agree with Dogman, the vocals are too wet. Everything else sounds very good, nice and clear. The ooh and aah stuff actually sounds pretty cool. The lead vox will sound more focused if you kill the reverb. The song is very good, nice solos.
Click to expand...

Thanks David....I like the oohs and ahhs as well....glad you liked the solos...they were fun to write/play!


Bulls Hit : Yeah the bass sounds great. Wish I could get bass to sound that good. The vocals are generally good, but yeah too much verb. I like the oooohs - reminds me of Bowie forsome reason. Nice melodies
Click to expand...


I love the sound of McCartney's Bass in a lot of the Beatles stuff as well as Chris Squire from Yes, and John Entwistle from The who...all pretty distinctive tones and kinda "lead Bass" kinda players...that is kinda the inspiration I shoot for with my bass playing....although I have nowhere near the skill as the above mentioned...I hear the Bowie thing alot which is cool by me since I like a lot of his Ziggy Stardust 70's era stuff...Thanks for commenting!


ido1957: The main vocals are a bit low and have more reverb than the instruments making them hard to distinguish in parts... Ooohs are really cool....
Solo(s) have a great tone, good for this style of tune.
Bass guitar sounds good - I like what you're doing there.
Cool tune - working from the lyrics can be fun.... I think you've written a great song together...
Click to expand...

Thanks Idol...it is a pretty cool way to work and I actually prefer to have the lyrics 1st and then write the music from what inspires me from the words...
Thanks for the listen!
 
Cool feel to this song, I agree the bass kicks! Nice. The song kind of has a Don't Cry GNR feel, kind of hypnotic too. The vox are a little hard to understand at times, probably wont be a problem if you're planning on drying them up a bit anyway. Solos are cool man. Sounds like in the 3:30 solo that the bass could be compressed a bit, the volume feels less even there. The outro guitar tone is sweet :D Nice track overall, an Axeman epic :cool: :D
 
Just had another listen, to the newer version. Much better vocals. They fit this well.

Great feel overall to the song. Very modern, but has many elements from the past. Great mesh here.

What are you playing the bass through? Very good tone....it has a great sound.

Much better job, in my opinion man...leave all teh vocal FX for those of us that can't sing.... :p
 
SnakeDog - Thanks mate! Yeah...It does have that Guns vibe to it...I was kinda thinking of November Rain also cause of the 2 little guitar breaks between the verses...and its length ....a bit long, but I haven't been able to figure what to cut ore edit.Thanks for the good word!


Dogman - I just put that up today after taking your advice and getting rid of the reverb on the lead vocals ....hard for me to leave 'em that dry...iI have to force myself not to click on the Reverb plugin for that track :p ...I also tried to get the "mud" out of the guitar solo's in the middle.
The Bass is just my Peavey T-40 thru a Pod xtlive with the BAss expansion pack added, which has a bunch of different bass amps modeled...
Thanks man for the encouragement and tips...
 
Much better vocal sound now - it has a presence or intimacy that suits the song well.... I hear a tad of reverb that keeps it blended nicely with the mix.
You have a Tom Petty/Dylan/Knopffler kinda flavour to your voice - cool....
Enjoyed revisiting this - your combined efforts have yielded great results....

:D :) :D :)
 
Teh Drums - Oh, they rock.
Teh Guitars - Oh, they rock. Very sweet.
Teh Bass - Oh, she's a-rockin'.
The Vox - Just the right kind to rock the piece.

Oh, did I mention that I really like this track? :p

Lyrics, are nice too. Very mature of you. :)

Sorry, I've been seeing this thread but only get limited time on the board to listen. Well, been watching 8 Simple Rules For Dating My Teenage Daughter. :)
 
Just wanted to say thanks to those that checked the tune out...I really appreciate all the feedback, tips...they help alot!
 
Nice tune. Drums sound good as usual. Seems like it might be a semi-tone or 2 too low for the singer. Some of the notes at the end of some lines are so low, it seems like they don't come out. The guitars are the highlight, for sure...always tasty. Nice, tune, buddy.
 
Cool tune Axeman.

Love the nice beat you`ve got here.

Graet work on the instruments, I think the vox are a bit burried dont hide them buddy theire really cool.

I really get a Waters vibe from this tune, way to go man, :cool:
 
Rami - Thanks Rami, I agree with the vocals...I really struggled with this...I personally don't care to much for how it sounds, and have been messing with singing it a bit higher...Appreciate the good word on the guitars...


Nakatira - Glad you dug it...thanks for listening!!
 
You must log in or register to reply here.
Back
Top