A Song For A Friend

[elbandito]

Earlier this year, an old friend of mine died - too young, to say the least. I wrote this song but never got around to recording it until a couple days ago... His sister's birthday is coming up and I'd like to give her the tune as a gift. There are a couple flubs that I plan to redo over the next couple of days but this is the meat of the recording and I was hoping that maybe a couple of you could give me a preliminary idea on how you feel the song is coming along. The overall balance of the song and the clarity of the lyrics is what I'm most concerned about - especially the ending.

I very much appreciate any and all advice you can give me about the song as a whole. I really want this to be something special.

 

[elbandito]

Lotsa views, no responses... guess that means it sucks and I'll have to redo the whole thing.

 

[propman]

Well... I almost didn't click on this thread because I was almost certain that the friend spoken of in the title had died and that's always really sad to hear. I'm really sorry you and all that knew and loved him had to lose him.

That being said, I listened to the song and while it doesn't 'suck,' I hear some things that could improve. Production wise, I don't think this track benefits from the reverb it's been drenched in. It's an intimate song and it sounds like it's being sung in a giant cave. Secondly, when you're JUST using an acoustic as backing, it might help during the verses if you'd pick the lowest string in the chord by itself before strumming the rest of it. I don't know if that makes sense. Like, um... 'doo - cha-da-cha.' It gives it more definition and structure, I think.

 

[sewickley]

excellent song, man.

 

[rayc]

What Propman said.

 

[nzausrec]

I hear - add bass, drums, violins. Put some effects on and some BV, sweet.
Holy shit, BVs!

Could have repeated chorus at end, vocal was a little unclear though at end.

 

[groundy]

No way this sucks, sounds good, possibly a bit more backing........