I like the introduction, though the piano does remind me of "My Words Are Weapons", but I think it may just be coincidence. When you get on to the actual beat I think the piano and sound effects go quiet too quickly and the main tune pops in too quickly and too loudly - it needs to gradually get louder whilst the others gradually gettin' quieter with the drum kit beginning when they're both at the right volume. Maybe the drums could've been a bit harder hittin'? It's a pretty good beat, but it's just the same all the way through - no hook? no change-ups?
Not bad, though - I like the intro best, that bit's pretty dope.
