3rd song - Any opinions, tips, etc?

[A. Frost]

Still learning obviously.

I think the guitar/drums start to overpower the vocals a bit at the last verse, but it hasn't bothered me so far. Sounds ok to me on my end, and family/friends like it and all but since I don't trust them I'd appreciate any opinions/tips/criticisms etc that you folks might have to offer.

There's two other tracks on my soundcloud page as well that I think I posted here before, but if your particularly bored or something feel free to check those out as well, maybe for any noticeable recurring problems or something.





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[mjbphotos]

Edit out the intial and final seconds of silence. The starting single guitar notes sound like you were checking tuning, rather than a true intro. There's a little cymbal hit in a few places that sounds bad - cymbal problem, just too small/cheap sounding.

 

[A. Frost]

Thanks. Not sure what heppened with the intro bit but the more i hear it the worse it sounds...i'll figure somehing else out that works better.

Not sure which cymbal yor refererring to but i think theres a china type thing in there that might be it...ill try to listen for it.

I very much appreciate the input, thanks.

 

[ido1957]

I think the vocals could come up a little in the lower notes. The lower notes are getting lost in the music and I'm a lyric listener
I think some automation might be the answer. Overall cool song though and well played. Reminded me of Steve Winwood's earlier stuffvocally

 

[A. Frost]

Word, i appreciate the reply. struggle alot with vocals cause (a) i dont really know how to sing and (b) my basement kinda sucks at current for recording. Always insecure about the vocals and never quite feel like i get it right.

It's already got a fair bit of automation on the vocals in places but i could maybe be a little more precise with it in some spots to get things clearer. Wasnt super happy with the vocal take anyway so maybe Ill just retrack it when i clean up other stuff.

 

[A. Frost]

Is this any better? Cleaned up some, new intro which I'll need to work on some I think to get it to fit in...might have to redo it because I can't seem to lose enough noise.

Overall sounds cleaner and clearer to me though on my end with what and where I can listen, but I'm having trouble deciding whether to keep tweaking it or just scratch these guitar/vocal takes and start over.

Annoying cymbal is still present for now also as I'm not sure if I want it gone or not.

Hope I'm not being an annoying pest or anything, but if anyone wouldn't mind giving a listen to this revision, I would appreciate it:



Here is the olde one for reference:
The Coming Storm (rough) by A. Frost on SoundCloud - Create, record and share your sounds for free