3 new ones-and I need your help

[P. Wellman]

I've just posted 3 new songs that I'm unsure of. I like Suckerpunch, but I'm not sure what I think of Dylan Thomas is Drunk- let me know- Ode to Mom is a personal song- that I'm not sure about either-it worked as a gift to my wife but does it work as a song to listen to- what do you think.

P. Wellman- drowning in a sea of cheese


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=552803

 

[rayc]

Dylan Thomas Was drunk. well he was usually wasn't he? The segue from intro to song isn't too smooth you could work on that.
The guitars have a lot of room around them & the vocals are even further from the focus.
the edit at 2.18 is too abrupt - you'll need to redo it or disguise it with some percussion.
This sounds like something I'd like to own once finished but it's a fair way from finished. I'm not sure the Brian may electric solo quite works with the song - it's a good solo but it doesn't sit well.An acoustic or classical solo would have been more in keeping OR drench it in verb so that it sits further back.
The chiming guitars at the end are nice.
It's a good song that just needs some re mixing & care with edits.
Get back to it.

 

[P. Wellman]

Thanks dude- back to the drawing board.