2 Songs for Feedback

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Morning/Evening wherever you are,

My first post of my lyrics in this discussion group. I've been writing for about 5 years now. The style of music which I write is aussie country / country rock / easy listening.

Here are two of my songs I wrote last year. So I'll dream is based around open chords and could be a country rock tune. Forever, Together Just You and Me is a country balad.

So I'll Dream

Verse 1
One Day I wanna fly to the Moon,
Maybe I won't or maybe I will.
There are lot's of things that I'd do,
but lifes to short to do it all.

I know what the end of the world is like,
it's not pretty, I've been there.
I know who is the love of my life,
and I haven't, met her yet.

Chorus
So I'll dream, make it all up
Say that I've done it like no one before.
Go places that you can never go.
And see faces that you can't see anymore.
So I'll dream.

Verse 2
I close my eyes and put back my head,
I've sitting on my old swing.
Back then I was so young, so innocent and free,
With not a worry in the wold to bother me.

It's cold ouside and it's getting dark,
I'm missing another sunset.
Suddenly the clouds disappear,
and there she is from blue to red.

Chorus
So I'll dream, make it all up
Say that I've done it like no one before.
Go places that you can never go.
And see faces that you can't see anymore.
So I'll dream.

Verse 3 (Bridge)
If you can imagine it, you can go there
Be as free as you want to be, anywhere.
You can fly up in the sky, with all the birds.
Or you can be just by yourself, undesturbed.

(Key Change)
Chorus
So I'll dream, make it all up
Say that I've done it like no one before.
Go places that you can never go.
And see faces that you can't see anymore.
So I'll dream.

© Daniel Porter 2001
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Forever, Together Just You and Me

Verse 1
Church bell's are ringing,
it's a Saturday afternoon.
Outside the front of a chuch,
there stands a Bride and her Groom.

Confetti's being thrown,
as they make their way to their car.
They're walking hand in hand,
ready for the journey there about to start.

Chorus
And he said...
We'll travel this road together,
we'll travel this road just you and me,
We'll travel this road forever,
Forever, together just you and me.

Verse 2
A couple of years pass them by,
the couple have a child.
A beautiful baby boy,
that's the gem of both their eyes.

They watch the young boy grow up,
to become a young man,
who finds the girl of his dream,
and then one day takes her hand.

Chorus
And he said...
We'll travel this road together,
we'll travel this road just you and me,
We'll travel this road forever,
Forever, together just you and me.

Verse 3 (First half Bridge)
Many more years pass them by,
the man gets very ill.
His loving wife sits by his side,
trying to put his mind at ease.

The both know the time has come,
they say their last good-bye's.
Time has been good to them,
The man shuts his eye's.

Chorus
And she said...
We'll travel this road together,
we'll travel this road just you and me,
We'll travel this road forever,
Forever, together just you and me.

© Daniel Porter 2001
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Would love comments and feed back.

Porter
 
let's try this again.

I like them both.

They are discriptive without being blatant

Personally I like to hear the tunes to go wiht them.



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