Very good work for 12 years old!Stylisticly its "poetic"...Just some ideas.
Try editing it ..Do you need the words ..LIKE,You might not need to state its a metophore..possilby BUT,A ..Economy,sometimes says more...Good luck nice job :)
Interesting...let use hear it with the music..
Queen of the castle
Doors are shut tight
The things you're hiding
Must never see light
A love for the Fascists
A hate of your {own,}{substitute CROWN} Just a idea
The people you trampled
So you'd be alone..
Good stuff :)
Lets see..Got Gibson Les Paul classic W/Burstbuckers
Fender Tele
Gibson Les Paul Jr. gotta love P90's
Supro Lap steel
Ibanez Artist{335 type}
Fender P bass
Takimine acoust...
I agree with Chessrock...The Old School Audio stuff is very nice!The closest to the Great River's personality is the L3{that I've tried} however you don't have the loading option..the C's are very good on drums like snare and kik and I really like the A's on overheads ect now Im useing the G/R...
Rhyme is fine.. Also dropping a exspected rhyme is a good device to lend the phrase importance..for examp. loose the rhyme and replace with a sylabic double...or something to that effect :)
Perhaps the TLM is a good pairing for your voice w/the Mackie vers. the KSM44..Nothing is is the perfect solution for all things..Voice is the tuffest thing to get{IMHO}just right and it changes ever so slightly day to day..If the TLM works for ya then go for it!Good luck :)
I don't care for the TLM103 as compared to its price..to me it has a harsher to top end...'spose when it works though..The KSM44,AT4060 are more useful on a variety of sources to me..The KSM can sound pretty darn good when you go thru a Great River or the like..It takes the personality of...
As for preamps..If you can find a Event EMP 1 it is much better than the ART..used it should run fairly inexpensive{about 50.00}..for a decent mic get a Shure SM57 new they are about 79.00 go to your local store and check one out..Its a "dynamic" mic no phantom power needed..Good luck :)