Café Innocenté Feb. Challenge

[louisv]

lyrics by Gecko Zzed.

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Café Innocenté.......................................................Translation

Intro
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verse 1
'There is no harm in that,' you said,
"A coffee in a public place,
Where chance encounter is just fine
And not a fall from grace"

verse 2
So I found a seat and counted time
And watched the clock upon the town hall wall
Son aiguille des minutes hésitait..............................(Its minute hand bounced haltingly)
Around its Roman numerals

Chorus
En-dessous du regard stricte.................................(Beneath the glare of righteousness)
Beneath a parasol somewhere
Beneath the heat of curiosity
I felt your probing stare

verse 3
tu as mit ton sac sur le banc.................................(You placed your bag on the chair)
Rusty grey and white
tes cheveux emmêlée par le vent...........................(Your hair in wind-tangled disarray)
But still you looked alright

Bridge
And I re-affirmed my fond belief,
I've felt this for some time
Ce Café Innocenté
Exists only in one's mind

Chorus
En-dessous du regard stricte................................(Beneath the glare of righteousness)
Beneath a parasol somewhere
Beneath the heat of curiosity
I felt your probing stare

verse 5
And only once did I look up
To catch the charcoal in your eye
Just one quick glance was quite enough
C'est consumer pour me dire bye...........................(That smoulder left me dry)

verse 6
I thought that if I raised my eyes
Just one more time
The embers there would flare to life
The answer would be the first line

 

[gecko zzed]

Well done!

I believe you are the first to get a challenge response posted!

I can't listen straight away, but I will do so as soon as I get the chance.

My contribution is simmering in the pot . . . I've got the basics done, but it still needs a bit of work.

 

[louisv]

Well done!

I believe you are the first to get a challenge response posted!

I can't listen straight away, but I will do so as soon as I get the chance.

My contribution is simmering in the pot . . . I've got the basics done, but it still needs a bit of work.

i can't wait to hear yours and get feedback from everyone

 

[gecko zzed]

Well . . . I have to say I'm impressed!

I would never have thought of tackling the song that way, and you have made it work within that genre very well.

You've done some really interesting things with the phrasing:"Still you look alright" about halfway through and "just one more time" at the end.

The French bits work really well . . . I was thinking at first that maybe the whole chorus could have been in French. But after listening to it a few times (well, lots, actually), I decided that the way you did works really well . . . it's kind of weird and interesting.

I think you have done a great job!

 

[louisv]

thanks for the short review


i'm happy you liked it