got a new song posted - called 'took my love to the liqour store'
any comments are greatly appreciated - mainly looking for stuff on the song itself, and how to improve it (I think it falls off a bit at the end - any suggestions on what to do?)
here is the link:
took my love to the liqour store
(please be patient with the web page, my Host is a load of shit )
here are the lyrics (although you can view them on the site too)
took my love to the liqour store
took my love to the liquor store
traded her for a pack of fours
I wear my heart on my sleeve
do not dry and do not bleach
I’m running out of shirts
and excuses for being hurt
I’m running out of shirts
took my love to the county fair
to the tunnel of love and I left her there
I kissed her under the tree
paint my face and let her see me
I’m running out of coins
and desire for the heat of her loins
I’m running out of coins
any comments are greatly appreciated - mainly looking for stuff on the song itself, and how to improve it (I think it falls off a bit at the end - any suggestions on what to do?)
here is the link:
took my love to the liqour store
(please be patient with the web page, my Host is a load of shit )
here are the lyrics (although you can view them on the site too)
took my love to the liqour store
took my love to the liquor store
traded her for a pack of fours
I wear my heart on my sleeve
do not dry and do not bleach
I’m running out of shirts
and excuses for being hurt
I’m running out of shirts
took my love to the county fair
to the tunnel of love and I left her there
I kissed her under the tree
paint my face and let her see me
I’m running out of coins
and desire for the heat of her loins
I’m running out of coins