New Song - Weren't mean to live this way

[Nightfire]

Just threw this together, kind of tired of writing in minor keys and have the lyrics turn out with sad/melancholic undertones, will try to write a happy one next.
I dont know if I will record this one, we'll see. Let me know what you think.

Weren't meant to live this way - Copyrights Mike Duerksen 2007

This world is black and blue
But so are you, but so are you
Sometimes I wonder if we fall
Who will we call, who will we call

We weren’t meant to live an ordinary life
We weren’t meant to live this way
We weren’t meant to live an ordinary life
No, we were meant to hope and pray

One down, and three to go
All that what’s left, is a hungry crow
Not everything is what it seems,
Woulda kept fightin’, if it was me

We weren’t meant to live an ordinary life
We weren’t meant to live this way
We weren’t meant to live an ordinary life
No, we were meant to hope and pray

Bridge
So don’t run away,
Just don’t be scared
Don’t be afraid
Birds singing in the air
Don’t leave this way
It’s just not fair



Mike

 

[ido1957]

Just threw this together, kind of tired of writing in minor keys and have the lyrics turn out with sad/melancholic undertones, will try to write a happy one next.
I dont know if I will record this one, we'll see. Let me know what you think.

Weren't meant to live this way - Copyrights Mike Duerksen 2007

This world is black and blue
But so are you, but so are you
Sometimes I wonder if we fall
Who will we call, who will we call

We weren’t meant to live an ordinary life
We weren’t meant to live this way
We weren’t meant to live an ordinary life
No, we were meant to hope and pray

One down, and three to go
All that what’s left, is a hungry crow
Not everything is what it seems,
Woulda kept fightin’, if it was me

We weren’t meant to live an ordinary life
We weren’t meant to live this way
We weren’t meant to live an ordinary life
No, we were meant to hope and pray

Bridge
So don’t run away,
Just don’t be scared
Don’t be afraid
Birds singing in the air
Don’t leave this way
It’s just not fair



Mike

is a hungry crow
Birds singing in the air
The two references to the birds doesn't seem to flow for me. They seem to be there just for the rhyme. I'm missing the story behind why they are there.

This has a strong rockin' feel to it, just reading through it. Definitely move forward with this - it has good feel to it......

 

[up-fiddler]

I like the repeats of the first and third lines of the first verse. Perhaps try carrying that through the rest of the song? ido1957 is right. It has a classic rock feel to it. Play with it and see what turns out.

 

[Nightfire]

Thanks guys. The birds reference has a meaning behind it, but the actual sentences dont really work in the song. I work on those lines and throw a very rough mix up sometime soon.


Mike