lend_me_talent
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My fuckin song writing is sucking right now. I'm a poet by nature and poetry is free flowing and more or less formless. Its not translating well into music.
Compound that with the fact that I don't know dick about music theory therefore I cant write a fucking melody at the moment so I have no concept of how to sing my songs.
I am planning to enroll in some music courses next semester, but I'm limited in what classes I can take (med school bound hopefully)
Don't get me wrong I can play the guitar, but I can't understand it or create my own shiat
well here are my latest bloated monstrosities. I need someone efficient to help me trim these fucking things down into a more popularized format.
[Too many nights for a one night stand
VERSE 1
This relationship is a vampire in daylight
It cast no reflection on the mirrors of our hearts
Because we’ve both been bled dry
We are nothing more than
A few stolen nights
Victims of lust fueled fire
yet you lack substance to feel me
Or to fill me with anything
But base desire
CHORUS
what fucking chorus???
VERSE 2
Tonight we’ll meet again
You’ll tell me about your day
I’ll regurgitate some phrase
Just to fill the silence
I’ll tell you the jokes you’ve
Heard a thousand times
and you’ll pretend to laugh again
until at last we resort to the only thing we have
and find brief solace in each others skin
Somewhere between the afterglow and reality
Lies the fact that all we ever had was chemistry
VERSE 3
In the morning we’ll avoid each others eyes
As our words avoid the truth
While in our minds we wonder where
Things went wrong
And just how a one night stand
Could last so long
We’ll head our separate ways
As our days begin
Speaking vows behind closed lips
As we depart
In denial of the fact that night will come again
UNTITLED
sHe was that girl you could pass
a 1,000 times and never see
possesor of a beauty less obvious
if only I hadn't been so oblivious
Might have seen the sun setting in her eyes
Now that I look back I see the signs
That this girl was going to take her life
She had gotten so far away from home
And lost a little more each day
She was crying when I left that night
I remember the tears that wet my lips
When I kissed her cheek
I would've found something better to say
If i'd known that was the last we'd ever speak
I would have told her that she was my friend
and that I loved her for what she kept within
but we were young and it never dawned on me
that theres no such thing as immortality
UNTITLED
I understand you because I see
The beauty in your frailty
To me you are poetry
You will always be the meter
and the verse of my humanity
I am the flower that your tears
have nourished
I hope I've bloomed to be
a worthy product of your devotion
I can only repay your beauty
by letting it shine through me
CHORUS
I've loved you all the time I've been
Before love was known to me
Your the well where life began
and your waters still run deep in me
VERSE 2
Doesn't matter what anyone says
I will never forget what you are
You spark all creation
and birth all creativity
bold as golden sunrise
shining down on me
You illuminate all hope
and embody all possibilities
I will never be more
Than a sum of the love
you've given me
I feel blessed to be that
and its all I'd ever want to be
Bridge
Remember the way I'd raise my chin?
afraid to show I hurt inside
You'd wrap me in your warmth
And tell me (that) it was ok to cry
Its a fear I have yet to overcome
but I'm back in your arms
Everytime I close my eyes
and all my fears subside
although I've grown into a man
I'll always be your little boy inside
I've pretty much stopped attempting to write choruses as I have yet to come up with a decent one. i think I've covered all bases here the obligatory bad relationship song, the obligatory song about loss, and the obligatory song for mama.
Thanks for reading,
JF
Compound that with the fact that I don't know dick about music theory therefore I cant write a fucking melody at the moment so I have no concept of how to sing my songs.
I am planning to enroll in some music courses next semester, but I'm limited in what classes I can take (med school bound hopefully)
Don't get me wrong I can play the guitar, but I can't understand it or create my own shiat
well here are my latest bloated monstrosities. I need someone efficient to help me trim these fucking things down into a more popularized format.
[Too many nights for a one night stand
VERSE 1
This relationship is a vampire in daylight
It cast no reflection on the mirrors of our hearts
Because we’ve both been bled dry
We are nothing more than
A few stolen nights
Victims of lust fueled fire
yet you lack substance to feel me
Or to fill me with anything
But base desire
CHORUS
what fucking chorus???
VERSE 2
Tonight we’ll meet again
You’ll tell me about your day
I’ll regurgitate some phrase
Just to fill the silence
I’ll tell you the jokes you’ve
Heard a thousand times
and you’ll pretend to laugh again
until at last we resort to the only thing we have
and find brief solace in each others skin
Somewhere between the afterglow and reality
Lies the fact that all we ever had was chemistry
VERSE 3
In the morning we’ll avoid each others eyes
As our words avoid the truth
While in our minds we wonder where
Things went wrong
And just how a one night stand
Could last so long
We’ll head our separate ways
As our days begin
Speaking vows behind closed lips
As we depart
In denial of the fact that night will come again
UNTITLED
sHe was that girl you could pass
a 1,000 times and never see
possesor of a beauty less obvious
if only I hadn't been so oblivious
Might have seen the sun setting in her eyes
Now that I look back I see the signs
That this girl was going to take her life
She had gotten so far away from home
And lost a little more each day
She was crying when I left that night
I remember the tears that wet my lips
When I kissed her cheek
I would've found something better to say
If i'd known that was the last we'd ever speak
I would have told her that she was my friend
and that I loved her for what she kept within
but we were young and it never dawned on me
that theres no such thing as immortality
UNTITLED
I understand you because I see
The beauty in your frailty
To me you are poetry
You will always be the meter
and the verse of my humanity
I am the flower that your tears
have nourished
I hope I've bloomed to be
a worthy product of your devotion
I can only repay your beauty
by letting it shine through me
CHORUS
I've loved you all the time I've been
Before love was known to me
Your the well where life began
and your waters still run deep in me
VERSE 2
Doesn't matter what anyone says
I will never forget what you are
You spark all creation
and birth all creativity
bold as golden sunrise
shining down on me
You illuminate all hope
and embody all possibilities
I will never be more
Than a sum of the love
you've given me
I feel blessed to be that
and its all I'd ever want to be
Bridge
Remember the way I'd raise my chin?
afraid to show I hurt inside
You'd wrap me in your warmth
And tell me (that) it was ok to cry
Its a fear I have yet to overcome
but I'm back in your arms
Everytime I close my eyes
and all my fears subside
although I've grown into a man
I'll always be your little boy inside
I've pretty much stopped attempting to write choruses as I have yet to come up with a decent one. i think I've covered all bases here the obligatory bad relationship song, the obligatory song about loss, and the obligatory song for mama.
Thanks for reading,
JF