andyhix
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This is a song I wrote for a band I was in about 10 years ago. It was a sorta punky noise band, and this was our obligitory ballad. I decided to revive it for the current band, and I'm really not happy with the lyrics, but I can't seem to make any headway on a rewrite. I just find them boring, repetitive and transparent, and a little cliche. I would just scrap them entirely, but they do work very well melodically with the music, so I'd like to try to massage it into something a little stronger. If I remember correctly, it's basically about some neighbor I had when I lived in an apartment, that seemed majorly stuck in a depressing routine of work, eat, sleep, repeat.
I'd be eternally grateful for any suggestions:
Verse1:
It’s kind of a shame
To wake up just to stay awake
It’s kind of a shame
To go home to stay at home
It’s kind of a shame
To buy your time by killing time
There’s not much to gain
When no one knows your name
Chorus:
What would it matter,
If they gave a damn about you?
Would your life shatter
And would the lies come true?
Verse2:
It’s kind of a waste
Don’t you think? Don’t you ever think?
It’s kind of a waste
To take them home; there’s no one home.
It’s kind of a waste
To buy your love, to try to love
Or try to escape,
When no one knows your name
Repeat Chorus
I'd be eternally grateful for any suggestions:
Verse1:
It’s kind of a shame
To wake up just to stay awake
It’s kind of a shame
To go home to stay at home
It’s kind of a shame
To buy your time by killing time
There’s not much to gain
When no one knows your name
Chorus:
What would it matter,
If they gave a damn about you?
Would your life shatter
And would the lies come true?
Verse2:
It’s kind of a waste
Don’t you think? Don’t you ever think?
It’s kind of a waste
To take them home; there’s no one home.
It’s kind of a waste
To buy your love, to try to love
Or try to escape,
When no one knows your name
Repeat Chorus