Another Divorce song

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analog4

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Hi everyone,

My ex tried to jam me today......So I decided to write this
little ditty I hope she gets to hear someday soon........

Almost Made It

Almost made it to the big time
Almost made it there
Now I sit in a rented trailer
Boy I'm going nowhere

Had a woman
Thought she loved me
But she had a plan
Five years in the making
To take all she can

She bedded me
And called me her lover
But she knew what for
To get her timing right to get all the money
And throw me out the door

Pre-chorus

I said darling here you are
I guess I know the score
But what I gave was never enough
She wanted MORE MORE MORE

Chrorus x2

She got herself a crooked lawyer
Who put in the fix
Left me cold and lonely
Livin' in the sticks

For years I've lived in misery
I cannot deny
Everytime I try to help myself
She sticks me in the eye

Pre-chorus

Chorusx2

solo

Pre-chorus

Chorus x2

ad lib and fini...

http://www.nowhereradio.com/geegee/singles

Hope you guys enjoy this one as much as I will playing it
for the b**ch....

Graham and Gina
 
I like the backing vocals...

maybe you should indicate them somehow in the lyrics?
doesn't a double-tracked line mean something different from an ordinary one?
No saxes?

I think this is my favorite of your songs on the website-
you sound really mad!

The low-fi (at least as it come through on the MP3) sound puts me in mind of Dejavoodoo, if you remember them.
 
Hey Track,

Was in a hurry---just threw it down--maybe I could co-op this
one with a few liked minded individuals.....
Definately needs the full treatment---with full horn section

What do you guys think??????

Hey Eric,

Too pissed off to arrange fully at the point of creation----sax
may follow----but it has a certain appeal the way it is (with
drums and screaming guitar of course) don't you think?????
 
"...and if you try to save this marrige again, I'll kill you!"



Uh, we're not in Kansas anymore! :D
 
OTOH: perhaps you should rethink this again. IMHO: look before you leap, the grass is always greener, and every day is a new beginning.
 
i can just imagine this as a roadhouse staple - nice flavor, rich and spicy!

i admit my bitter lyrics gravitate more towards the stark and simple, acerbic stuff, like Liz Phair's "Divorce Song." great mix of everyday reasons why it didn't work, with some serious mindfuck reasons - all with the same deadeye delivery.
 
Good lyrics, good (but sad story line).

I'm a fan of lyrics that tell a story - in particular, a story that listener's can easily relate to. You achieved both.

They say true art comes from suffering...............so consider this the price to pay for your art!!!!!! :eek:
 
And then....and then....and then....

So far --so good, but you might want to consider writing a final verse that lifts the mood or somehow resolves or brings closure to your sad plight.
Like maybe you get a lawyer who is a badder dog than her's. Maybe you gott a million stashed that she can't find, maybe you got a babe or two in the wings, ready to take the rest of your stuff????
I'm sure you can come up with something even better if you give it a chance.

writeonnnnnnn
chazba
 
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