Well, the obvious first; needs real drums to kick harder... But, since you don't probably have that available, try a different snare that has a lot more "pop". The primary guitar distortion is a smidge over the top. Well, OK, more than a smidge, but that's subjective. The playing is fine, no its; your rhythm is good; lead needs to be higher in the mix; don't be 'fraid...
Good start!
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