Actually it`s a pretty good tracking example and tight, but the mixing and some other things could use a few touches. The drums are the pivot point in the mix over everything else. the bass is a bit too thin, The vocals need to come up and out front, the guitar is slightly out of tune. The semitone alternating b/# on the bass in the bridge is a bit noticable. Tight playing though...
Reminds me a bit of "Whips and Reins" off the "Santa`s Reindeer Drag Reprise" album.