You got some good groundwork down.I don't like the suddenness of the intro,almost like you cut it at the exact moment the audio started.Drums are really in trouble.Almost non-existant kick,dry snare and tinny hats that might work if the levels were'nt so hight.The ending sounds the best,when the instrament start to drop out and the drums come thru a little more.I like the melody of the leads and you could sing something real soulfull over the rythm but the mix is overbearing.Re-mix is a must.I'm no EQ wiz,so I can't help ya with that but you need to differentiate the instraments a little more,sounds better on my headphones(3rd listen).Lead guitar sounds over processed,very electronic rather than electric.Not bad over all.Why so short?