B. SABBATH would like that guitar in the intro.
Good seperation between the elements. Just before 00:59, move the drums out of the center to the left, pan the keys over high right, and move the guitar into the center, and then stay there for awhile.
There's lots of opportunities for creative panning here, to 'feature' each instrument in the middle for a moment.
Just before 01:34 move all the elements closer into the heart of the stereo field.
Make a post on the songwriter's forum, you'll have lyric ideas in a jiffy , and could spawn a really nice thread there, I encourage you to post on the songwriter's forum.
The drumming here is very well done. Tasteful through the riffs, and nice fills, executed well.
This is some of the best micing and recording of drums with only two overheads I have ever heard. Keep working on your drum rig, and you'll be the best on this board in no time.
The mix is very compressed, I would release some of the compression on the guitar if possible for more dynamic.
Cool stuff !
Thanks for sharing !