this is really good... maybe bring the vocals up a little and compress them a bit, --compression is my answer to everything, you can usually just ignore anything i say about compression, all of my own music sounds like it's about to blow the speakers and the voice sounds like it's coming through a telephone, but that's the way i like it-- but other than that, this is really really good, and i like the song too... i mean as far as the writing and performance... all around i'd give it a ten and the only changes that could be made are not even necessary, more a matter of my own personal preferences.