Misunderstanding - Commanda (Jan/Feb Challenge)

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At the risk of scaring off everybody from this challenge, lest they end up with my lyrics, here it is.

(verse 1)
Pretty as such I know I'm not
And I don't really give a damn
Is it really asking too much
For you to call me ma'am

(chorus)
Flowers are pretty
Music's like wine
Why does this happen all of the time
Life is so shitty
Waters like brine
Why does this happen all of the time

(verse 2)
Ugly as sin if you're trying too hard
A case for less is more
Dressed to kill and badly done
And you could be a whore

(verse 3)
Write you a book if I thought it'd help
Or draw you a diagram
But is it really asking too much
For you to call me ma'am
 
Here's a quickie

Forgive me

V1
Your behavior at the party was a chore (alt - abhorrent)
(alt line) The branding of the guests became a torrent
All your branding of the guests became a bore
I thought we were going to have a ball
But you changed with every shot of alcohol

V2
At times I don’t get your point of view
Once you’re drunk all you do is argue
About the silly little things that come along
Like who the hell invented the water bong

Chorus
Forgive me if I seem demanding
I was there when you said the plane was landing
You didn’t even bother to phone
This is it, I can’t abide, I can’t condone
Another misunderstanding
Your grasp of the facts is not commanding
I guess you just don’t get it
(alt line) I can't live being forever in your debt
This is it, it’s over now, forget it

V3
Oh the time when we went to Paris?
You ended up at the bar with Harris
Yes you did, see, your mind is going
Can’t you see, your tepid game is showing

V4
Again, you remember it different
Irregardless of the facts or content
In the apologetic note you left me
In the clutter and the thick debris

Chorus
 
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up-fiddler's misunderstanding

I have a melody that ran trhough my head while writing this. I tried to keep the syllable counts even to make it easier for someone else to put it to music. I like the use of short, choppy phrasing with the concept of misunderstanding. If you don't that's OK. You will see that I punctuated it into sentences etc. to facilitate smoother reading if that is your desire.

Misunderstood.
c.Dave Morehouse 2010

It’s late
And fate
Won’t let us be.
We laugh
Because
Uncertainty
Won’t let us share our thoughts,
Our dreams, our fantasies.

Chs.
When we cry, cry cried
Like you knew we would.
We don’t know why, why, why
We were misunderstood.
Wake up! Get real and listen well.
At last our screaming hearts won’t yell.

And now
We hide
Inside ourselves.
Until
The truth
Comes off the shelves.
And then we’ll scream with joy
Quite loud enough to tremble Hell.

But… Chs

Bridge
When we wish upon a star
We often fall from where we are.
We see the ground rush up so fast,
Quite sure, that this will be our last.

But…Chs.
 
mine

I've posted mine in another thread because even if the subject (misunderstanding) inspired me i knew i wouldn't have time to record someone else's song because i have other priorities at the moment but still, this is what i came up with:

[Chorus]
Where are you?
End this now
Are you there
Reunite us now or
End this now

[Verse 1]
Maybe you don't get it
I can explain it yeah
So no one gets confused
Under, above, abused
No way you got that
Day after day after the other
Everyone stays back
Re-looking around older

[Bridge // guitar solo]

[Verse 2]
Statue that know my quest well
Thanks and farewell
And caught in her spell
None sees a fairy tell
Dead and gone girl
I'm traveling around the world
Never gonna find this thing
God, am i misunderstanding

[Chorus]
Where are you?
End this now
Are you there
Reunite us now or
End this now
 
Well, I'm getting there. 2 verses and a chorus so far, still need a bridge, maybe a I will write a middle 8 instead. Lol
 
Extra credit

Another piece, playing with homonyms.

I hear this as a chant or a trance, with a simple whole step melody that maybe modulates in 5ths.

The final stanza being a bit different, maybe a modulation to the 4th.

*********************

(My heroine is heroin)


The sun, the morning
The gun, the warning
The son, the mourning
The pain reborn

My heart, my soul
My part, my sole
Relieve my pain
Gaze through the pane

Distorted chord
Imported cord
All for naught
Sailors knot

A pack of smokes
A line of coke
Now anything
Cep’t tele ring

I did my best
He passed the test
A life too drab
Lie on the slab

Too old, to have
To hold, to halve
To see, to hear
To have him here

My heroine is heroin
My life is bare and I don’t care
My love is gone, can’t carry on
The room is din, the curtain drawn
The certain dawn will come along
But knowing why’s another thing
My endless cry, tomorrow bring
Another misunderstanding
 
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up-fiddler said:
Perhaps you could write half the bridge and a middle four? :D:D
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Thanks Dave, that is the just the encouragement that I needed. Taking your advice, I wrote half a bridge and half a middle 8.:D

Now, to make it work musically.
 
Here is a funny one

(Got me a GPS)


Chorus

Got me a GPS
Now I don’t have to guess
But the thing started speaking French
And I drove right into a trench

French is not my native tongue
Should of learned it when I was young
But none of it made no sense
I really got no defense

V1
I went on a trip to Mexico
I really just had to go
The scene was bringing me down
I had to get out of town

So being a sensible chap
I got me a Mexico map
And point the hood due south
With a spliff hanging outta my mouth

As soon as I crossed the border
My plan fell into disorder
Not one sign could I read
Failure I must concede

So I pulled into the surplus store
I could tell by the gun on the door
I felt like a stupid ass
I said hágale habla ingles

A voice in the back said yes
I said you got any GPS
He said yeah but it no work good
Might he have misunderstood?

Sistema global de posición?
He said si de surfista de señor
So I made the acquisition
And walked back out the door

Installed the new GPS
Kicked back and I yelled “hell yes”
My speed I had to double
But I soon ran into trouble

Chorus

Got me a GPS
Now I don’t have to guess
But the thing started speaking French
And I drove right into a trench

French is not my native tongue
Should of learned it when I was young
But none of it made no sense
I really got no defense
 
I'll have a go at it:
Misunderstanding
I can cool your heals and leave you stranded
My little miss understandin
You can sense the hit but don't trust this
My little miss understandin?

Chorus:
Why do you see me like this
I'm not the one that's on your list
Gotta be misunderstanding

I'm as hot as the sun but I don't give ya none
a little misundertandin
When you thirst for lust I'm just a bust
I'm a little misunderstandin

Chorus:

Bridge:
I try so hard to get it right
sometimes it keeps me up all night
If I go away for another day
Will you be there and promise to stay?

Chorus:

Now don't go away, here what I say
I'm walking out here on the landing
Don't leave me alone you will take me on home
my little misunderstanding?
 
Still in work

Took a quick shot at this. Still new to songwriting. Figured I would post what I have so far for some comments. Still need a second verse and bridge.

Understand Me

v1

Another fight
Are you serious
Here we are again
a restless night

Please Don't yell
I tried to explain
My words on deaf ears
tears start to well

pre c

I didn't mean what i said
it came out anyway
please turn around
I'm begging you to stay

C

It's not right
It's not fair
I'm sorry for
what i did to you

Why can't you ever just
listen to me

one more night
one more chance
Let me make this
better baby

Please understand me

v2

This empty place
echoing silence
since you ran out with
tears on your face





pre c 2

I didn't mean what i said
it came out anyway
please turn around
i beg you to stay

c

It's not right
It's not fair
I'm sorry for
what i did to you

Why can't you ever just
listen to me

one more night
one more chance
Let me make this
better baby

Please understand me

b

I didn't think
you didn't listen
I didn't lie
you didn't care
 
captbz13 said:
Took a quick shot at this. Still new to songwriting. Figured I would post what I have so far for some comments. Still need a second verse and bridge.

Understand Me

v1

Another fight
Are you serious
Here we are again
a restless night

Please Don't yell
I tried to explain
My words on deaf ears
tears start to well

pre c

I didn't mean what i said
it came out anyway
please turn around
I'm begging you to stay

C

It's not right
It's not fair
I'm sorry for
what i did to you

Why can't you ever just
listen to me

one more night
one more chance
Let me make this
better baby

Please understand me

v2

This empty place
echoing silence
since you ran out with
tears on your face





pre c 2

I didn't mean what i said
it came out anyway
please turn around
i beg you to stay

c

It's not right
It's not fair
I'm sorry for
what i did to you

Why can't you ever just
listen to me

one more night
one more chance
Let me make this
better baby

Please understand me

b

I didn't think
you didn't listen
I didn't lie
you didn't care
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Thanks for adding this to the menagerie of lyrics we have for this challenge. I'm pleased you decided to go ahead and do it. Those sharp, short lines will make for an interesting musical treatment.

There are a couple of lines that you might like to think about. For example, "I'm begging you to stay" is fairly commonplace, and with a bit of luck, you could come up with something that carries that thought but tells it in a more original way.
 
Understand Me - Slight rewrite

Final Edit. Took this as far as I can


v1

Shut the light
I can't look at you
Anger in her voice
another fight

Please Don't yell
I tried to explain
My words fall short
her tears start to well

pre c

I didn't mean what i said
But it came out anyway
maybe when morning comes
I'll know what to say

C

It's not right
It's not fair (alt. That's not me)
I'm sorry for
what i did to you

Why can't you ever just
listen to me

one more night
one more chance
Let me make this
better baby

Please understand me

v2

This empty place
echoing silence
since you ran out
With tears on your face

Nowhere to hide
From haunting feelings
Failed to fix it all
Though i tried...i know i tried

pre c

I didn't mean what i said
But it came out anyway
maybe when morning comes
I'll know what to say


B

I never think, you should have listened
I didn't lie, my heart is broken
I cannot take all the tension
You can't fix it anymore

I promise you I'll change our future
You couldn't even save our past
Give me time to explain this
Please Just let go of that door


C

It's not right
It's not fair (alt. That's not me)
I'm sorry for
what i did to you

Why can't you ever just
listen to me

one more night
one more chance
Let me make this
better baby

Please understand me
 
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Challenge

I feel the excitement also. With that being said, here is my entry for the challenge. I plan to record this song also and have the melody in mind along with the cord chart, but I bet someone else will do a better job. Whoever gets this song to record, please feel free to edit and change any parts to fit your style.

Misunderstanding
Charlie Nixon
C 2010

Verse 1
If eyes could talk, what would yours say?
You speak of love, but your eyes give you away.
Once they were bright, filled with delight.
Now they’re just cold, cold and gray.

Chorus
Is this love or is love a dream?
Am I a pawn, in your scheme?
Did I misunderstand, am I part of your plan, or was this just a fling?
Is this love or is love a dream?

Verse 2
The look on your face, when he looks your way.
Leaves me confused, and my, ego bruised.
I thought you were mine, you said for all time.
Now you seem far, far away.

Chorus
Bridge
Tell me I’m wrong, tell me that our love is strong.
Tell me it’s real, oh so real.
Tell me I’m wrong, tell me that our love hasn’t gone.
Tell me it’s real, oh so real.

Chorus
Outro
 
Just under the wire!! I have been working 16-18 hrs a day, opening a luxury hotel a week from now, just as the Winter Olympics begin.

But I managed to slap together some simple lyrics - here they are:

NOT WHAT I MEANT

V1
Well we talked and we talked
Till we were blue in the face
Looked like we were getting somewhere

Sometimes close, sometimes far
Givin each other space
Workin hard to clear the air

CH
Then I sent you the note
Never had too much time
Thought I could get it all in two little lines
You took it so that I was only wanting to vent
But baby how you took it
Was not what I meant

V2
Email and text
Might get the point across
But the meaning gets lost on the way

Words on a page
No eyes, voice or hands
I could have just called you that day

CH
But I sent you the note
Never had too much time
Thought I could get it all in two little lines
What I attempted to say, got tragically bent
Cause baby how you took it
Was not what I meant



Apologies in advance to the poor soul that gets handed my lyrics, LOL
 
You were the parasite

Hello all... Im new here, but thought I'd post this up for the fun of it. A little less traditionally structured than most, I suppose.

EDIT---- My apologies, ironically, I misunderstood this whole post. This does in a very offhanded way about misunderstanding.
But, yeah, delete if necessary.

You were the parasite

You were the song
which has been so very long
stuck in my head.
Circling its spindle,
a scratching needle,
over and over again.

And, I've tried to pour you out,
but no words fall from my pen.
I feel you even in my fingertips,
but you never reach the frets.
And, still, Ill press my fingers to these clumsy, tired chords
which found their way into my head somehow even before you.
And, they'll just have to be suitable
as a place to rest your head.
Because your presence is rather heavy now,
I badly could use this weight lifted from my chest...

You were the parasite which crawled inside
and sleeps in my viens
or, the apparition which closely shadows
every step I take
towards moving forward,
toward getting myself in line,
and the funny thing is
you used to be my crutch,
and now youre dragging me behind.

Now I hardly ever actually see your face,
and so only in my mind do you now exist.
As our past drifts far from present,
it has left me just a trace.
A lingering bit of your presence,
in my mouth a bittersweet taste
of longing for times lodged far back in my mind,
and theyre right there, so crystal clear,
but so intangible...
But, I'm one to "take it for what its worth".
And this is worth a thousand nights unsleepable,
a thousand thoughts unthinkable,
and just a few pictures for which no number of words could be suitable...

Yeah, you were the parasite which crawled inside,
and sleeps in my veins.
Or, the apparition which closely shadows
every step I take
toward moving forward, towards getting myself in line,
and the funny thing is, you used to be my crutch,
now youre dragging me behind.



Thanks for taking the time to read. Opinions very welcome.
 
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