o.k...to be honest, the first part really sucks. The guitars seem really sloppy, not in a good way, and a bit out of tune. Now, having said this, once it kicks in with the "echo", it kicks ass. I don't know if you made the first part suck soo bad to make it sound completely cool once it kicks in, but you should get rid of it. Put something else in the lead in. Something abstract, but nice and quiet. Whispering type stuff. Keep it up. This could turn out awesome.