joejohnstun
New member
High! My first HomeRecording song. I record in my sunny room, doing all the instruments, percussion, vocals, and mixing myself, so you could say these are demos tossed together like a sound-salad.
I'm mostly looking for songwriting critiques, words are my legos of choice, music not as much (as I'd like it to be), so be brutal. But also if you notice something glaring that I should fix on the production end, I would also love to improve my mixing skills (lack of).
I want to post these while they're still rough and I'm still excited by them before they become jaded staples in the walls of my mind. Of course, that means they'll have lots of room for improvements.
In this one, I pretty much have the song how I want it to be. It's less of a one-guitar demo and more of an amateur single that I could send to labels. I'm wondering if there are any glaring frequency clashes that I missed. Or anything that you might notice that needs to be brought to my attention.
Oh by the way, since it's not mastered, I added a maximizer to the master track to boost the volume a little. There is a tiny bit of clipping when the final chorus smashes in. So I am aware of that, and I'll get it properly mastered at some future point. Or not.
Thank you!
https://soundcloud.com/joejohnstun/when-youre-bad
When You're Bad
You're beautiful when you're bad
You push me to the edge
You have it all when you're bad
Your lipstick left on a cigarette
You dance on the table, dressed like a lady,
Drinking and driving me crazy
You're beautiful
Vodka
In a shot cup
With the sound up
And the Do Not Disturb us on the door
You're an artist
In the darkness
I am breathless
And the bedsheets beg me, beg for more
You're beautiful when you're bad
You push me to the edge
You have it all when you're bad
Leave your lipstick red on a cigarette
You dance on the table, dressed like a lady,
Drinking and driving me crazy
You're beautiful
When you're bad
In a second
We're suspended
As she dances
With her French Connection on the floor
We leapt in
To the deep end
She's a legend
And I'm letting her think that she's in control, you're in control
I'm mostly looking for songwriting critiques, words are my legos of choice, music not as much (as I'd like it to be), so be brutal. But also if you notice something glaring that I should fix on the production end, I would also love to improve my mixing skills (lack of).
I want to post these while they're still rough and I'm still excited by them before they become jaded staples in the walls of my mind. Of course, that means they'll have lots of room for improvements.
In this one, I pretty much have the song how I want it to be. It's less of a one-guitar demo and more of an amateur single that I could send to labels. I'm wondering if there are any glaring frequency clashes that I missed. Or anything that you might notice that needs to be brought to my attention.
Oh by the way, since it's not mastered, I added a maximizer to the master track to boost the volume a little. There is a tiny bit of clipping when the final chorus smashes in. So I am aware of that, and I'll get it properly mastered at some future point. Or not.
Thank you!
https://soundcloud.com/joejohnstun/when-youre-bad
When You're Bad
You're beautiful when you're bad
You push me to the edge
You have it all when you're bad
Your lipstick left on a cigarette
You dance on the table, dressed like a lady,
Drinking and driving me crazy
You're beautiful
Vodka
In a shot cup
With the sound up
And the Do Not Disturb us on the door
You're an artist
In the darkness
I am breathless
And the bedsheets beg me, beg for more
You're beautiful when you're bad
You push me to the edge
You have it all when you're bad
Leave your lipstick red on a cigarette
You dance on the table, dressed like a lady,
Drinking and driving me crazy
You're beautiful
When you're bad
In a second
We're suspended
As she dances
With her French Connection on the floor
We leapt in
To the deep end
She's a legend
And I'm letting her think that she's in control, you're in control