guitarhunny
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I just wanted to get some opinions on this song I am working on.
Song/guitar/vocals by Guitarhunny
Drums/Bass by Bentrabbit
Song/guitar/vocals by Guitarhunny
Drums/Bass by Bentrabbit
guitarhunny said:I just wanted to get some opinions on this song I am working on.
Song/guitar/vocals by Guitarhunny
Drums/Bass by Bentrabbit
xfinsterx said:The voice is sort of reminicent of Dolly Parton.
Obviously the "sound of the drums" is pretty weak, but the playing was tight and not overplayed so thats good.
I listened to it twice, and it does seem a little long to me.
There may be a few bits you could edit out to tighten it up the tune a little.
Like they do in movies, they might film 4 hours, but you only see 2, and never know the difference.
I like the part between 2:10 and 2:30 or so when it sort of cresciendo's.
Seems like the verses could be shortened, and that little chorus at 2:10 could be added once or twice more, pehaps twice in a row at the end.
-Finster
guitarhunny said:I completely get what you are saying. I'll admit it's a bit repetitive. I just don't want to change it. I may later but I'm way too attached to all the verses for now.
mshilarious said:If you're looking to play with lyrics, the first two verses start with clichés. The first one works great anyway because it smacks the listener right between the eyes. The second one "If you were a drug, I'd overdose" . . . is not as strong; it could stand a rework.
I am going to listen again when I get home. I couldn't hear everything the way I wanted to on these pc speakers here at work.guitarhunny said:Thanks for your comments. I appreciate them.