thoughts on this rough draft I'm starting?

[AaronGeorge]

I'm re-doing this track; so far I only got to the verse. Plan to keep the vocals.

anything?
http://soundcloud.com/arungeorge/aaron-george-unreleased-demo

 

[Phrasemaker]

It's a pleasant enough sound texture to the part you have posted. everything aside form the vocals seems to sit back in this mix and I'd personally like to hear the detail cut through a little more sharply but without overshadowing the general vibe of the music. The vocal sounds almost like it has pitch correction which might simply be your diction, it's not glaring but but does sound a little odd here and there. Nice though.

cheers

Tim

 

[AaronGeorge]

Thank you; will keep in mind.

 

[mjbphotos]

The kick is way to in front, hard to judge the vocals as opposed to the rest of it.

 

[George Harwood]

Try to get some of the sibilance out of the vocals. I like the 'airiness' of the vocals but the S sounds are really punishing my ears at a couple of points. Nice work though.

 

[chandlerhimself]

I think it sounds ok, but like others said the insturments kind of seem to be in the background and aren't blended well with the vocal. I'd cut that guitar too. It sounds fizzy, thin and out of place. The line it's playing sounds good, but use a synth instead. I think this could turn into a great song though, I like the vibe of it. Keep at it.