AaronChapman
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So, I had posted the details of this song in the songwriting forum and I received some good feedback. We agreed that I need to change the second verse to break up the repetition some. I was experimenting on the
guitar a while ago and came up with the following for the song. I'm interested in hearing what you think of the song in general. It's not a polished recording at all. I think I need to brighten the vocals in areas and
of course, sing more openly. I guess I'm just wondering if the chord progressions and the vocal style jibe? I was going for a modern mix of Tracey Chapman (give me one reason) and Elmore James with my own
little touch of course. That's at least who I was thinking of when working on the thing, I doubt it shares any similarities . The guitar may be a little too prominent in the song- tell me what you think. Also, I should mention that
the Chorus doesn't really function as a Chorus here. I might spice that up or move things around.
Glass Of Sorrow (song Idea, raw recording) by Aaron Chap | Free Listening on SoundCloud
Here are the lyrics (yet to change the second verse. Still deciding on something for that)
You're a fine glass of wine. Oh, but you taste so sweet.
You're a tall glass of sorrow. Oh, but you taste so sweet.
And if I wasn't always drinking, I might know, how you poison me so. How you poison me so.
Chorus:
A sip here and there leaves me shaking at the knees.
When the glass is all empty I feel guilty for the need.
You wash away, wash away, wash away the care.
And by such cavalier, I've learnt only to despair.
Cause you're a
Fine glass of wine. Oh, but you taste so sweet.
You're a tall glass of sorrow. Oh, but you taste so sweet.
And if I wasn't always drinking, I might know how you poison me so. How you poison me so.
Chorus:
Cause a sip here and there leaves me shaking at the knees.
When the glass is all empty I feel guilty for the need.
You wash away, wash away, wash away the care.
And by such cavalier, I've learnt only to despair.
Cause you're a fine glass of wine to me, the most expensive wine there is. An expensive glass of sorrow, something that I should never miss.
But, if there's one thing I know for certain from such a mystery. It's that when I'm finally feeling happy, you're nowhere to be seen.
guitar a while ago and came up with the following for the song. I'm interested in hearing what you think of the song in general. It's not a polished recording at all. I think I need to brighten the vocals in areas and
of course, sing more openly. I guess I'm just wondering if the chord progressions and the vocal style jibe? I was going for a modern mix of Tracey Chapman (give me one reason) and Elmore James with my own
little touch of course. That's at least who I was thinking of when working on the thing, I doubt it shares any similarities . The guitar may be a little too prominent in the song- tell me what you think. Also, I should mention that
the Chorus doesn't really function as a Chorus here. I might spice that up or move things around.
Glass Of Sorrow (song Idea, raw recording) by Aaron Chap | Free Listening on SoundCloud
Here are the lyrics (yet to change the second verse. Still deciding on something for that)
You're a fine glass of wine. Oh, but you taste so sweet.
You're a tall glass of sorrow. Oh, but you taste so sweet.
And if I wasn't always drinking, I might know, how you poison me so. How you poison me so.
Chorus:
A sip here and there leaves me shaking at the knees.
When the glass is all empty I feel guilty for the need.
You wash away, wash away, wash away the care.
And by such cavalier, I've learnt only to despair.
Cause you're a
Fine glass of wine. Oh, but you taste so sweet.
You're a tall glass of sorrow. Oh, but you taste so sweet.
And if I wasn't always drinking, I might know how you poison me so. How you poison me so.
Chorus:
Cause a sip here and there leaves me shaking at the knees.
When the glass is all empty I feel guilty for the need.
You wash away, wash away, wash away the care.
And by such cavalier, I've learnt only to despair.
Cause you're a fine glass of wine to me, the most expensive wine there is. An expensive glass of sorrow, something that I should never miss.
But, if there's one thing I know for certain from such a mystery. It's that when I'm finally feeling happy, you're nowhere to be seen.