Song for your coworkers

Sloan

Sloan

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Here's a nice little song I wrote for my coworkers.
The recording was quick and sloppy - I plan to go back and redo it.
Some of the lyrics are even wrong, just a first take recorded.
It's basically just a sketch.

Listen Here:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/sloanstewartmusic.htm

The wordage:

Every day, I gotta go to a place
that makes me cry and puts a frown on my face

Once I get there, I gets even worse
Cause of all the f*cktards with I have to work

Smelling so bad, and talking so south
I can't even tell what's comin' outta their mouths

I try to do good, but they screw it all up
Managers complain and then we all get f*cked

Stupid (lalala)
Motherf*ckers (lalala)

Stupid (lalala)
Motherf*ckers (lalala)

I work with

Stupid (lalala)
Motherf*ckers (lalala)

Stupid (lalala)
Motherf*ckers (lalala)

I gotta get my ghetty green
But these damn people make me wanna scream

Running around without a care in their minds
I'm doing damage control 90% of the time

Their ears are closed but their mouths' wide open
They should die in a wreck, that's what I'm hopin'

Just the sight of their inbred selves
makes me wanna kick their asses to hell

Stupid (lalala)
Motherf*ckers (lalala)

Stupid (lalala)
Motherf*ckers (lalala)

I work with

Stupid (lalala)
Motherf*ckers (lalala)

Stupid (lalala)
Motherf*ckers (lalala)

(©2004 Sloan Stewart)
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Garry Sharp said:
Please tell me you're not serious.....

(PS you stole somebody else's melody)
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What melody would that be?

Of course I'm serious!
I took my stereo to work and played it for them.
Quite the enjoyable experience really.

I plan on going back and actually working on it to make it sound "good".
 
I kinda like it. hehe
You took a stereo to work and let them hear it? looool Now thats funny. And wild.
As a fun song its..... funny
As a hit its outta bounds
:p
 
Emusic said:
I kinda like it. hehe
You took a stereo to work and let them hear it? looool Now thats funny. And wild.
As a fun song its..... funny
As a hit its outta bounds
:p
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Thanks for the comments!

Anyone have any suggestions when I re-recored it/go for a finished product?
I'm thinking about adding some drums somewhere and a little electric guitar, bass and the like. Not sure if it would take away or add to the song or not...
 
My suggestions. Keep it as a fun song. Dont think it has that hit potential, but as a fun piece it might work.
So add some fun rythm stuff. Think about "I'm just a gigolo". Add some of the same feeling?
I'm not talking about the rythm, but more that kinda fun feeling/groove. This song has to be presented in that ironic way; especially when performed for your coworkers.
If you did this one in a Black metal version on the Xmas event they would hunt you down, lol.
 
Emusic said:
My suggestions. Keep it as a fun song. Dont think it has that hit potential, but as a fun piece it might work.
So add some fun rythm stuff. Think about "I'm just a gigolo". Add some of the same feeling?
I'm not talking about the rythm, but more that kinda fun feeling/groove. This song has to be presented in that ironic way; especially when performed for your coworkers.
If you did this one in a Black metal version on the Xmas event they would hunt you down, lol.
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haha.
Yeah, the whole thing is just a fun thing.
I'm sure my coworkers feel the same way about me sometimes as well!

It sure is easier to write a joke/novelty song than something you really feel for.
This whole thing recording and all only took about an hour. I was really suprised by the results. My friends seem to dig it a bit.

I'm still wondering what melody I "stole"...
 
Can't place the melody by name Sloan but I have definitely heard it before. Often happens when you write something quickly :)
 
Holy shit! That is by far the coolest thing I have heard today. I had to share it with my nearby cubicle neighbors. They are fucking idiots as well.
 
invisiblenemies said:
Holy shit! That is by far the coolest thing I have heard today. I had to share it with my nearby cubicle neighbors. They are fucking idiots as well.
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hahaha.
thanks.
 
Garry Sharp said:
Can't place the melody by name Sloan but I have definitely heard it before. Often happens when you write something quickly :)
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1200 Pop songs I know of uses the chord progression C-G-Am-F
Many of them HUUUUGE hits
"Let it be" is one of them. "Drowning" (BSB) is another one. "Cry" (Lasgo) to mention a third. Also many songs share the same melody line for several parts. With only 12 notes and 24 basic chords its almost impossible to not fall into something that hasn't been done before.
But by doing it in a way that is different it will stand out from the rest
I have never heard anything that sounds like this one.
Neither have I heard such a silly and good song in some time.
Its just wild and crazy and pathetic and funny and great. All at the same time.
Prehehe
Keep it up!

BTW; cut down the intro play to 4 beats? Or was it 8? Cant remember if yours is 8 or 16. Anyway; half it! :p
 
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Fair enough. Personally I don't think it's a song, I think it's a ditty, and I don't like it at all but that's only my view and without our differences we would all be pointless, so I say well done Sloan and good on you mate :)
 
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