I was listening to the YouTube version, 'cause I wasn't sure what to listen to. Sounds VERY Nirvana. LOL! That's not a bad thing. It has a lot of potential. But, yeah... everything sounds like it was recorded under a blanket. And nothing... happens. If this started as an intro and then a huge blast of drums and bass and guitars blew your mind, this would be amazing. I know it's a work in progress, but like Bruthish said, it sounds like you have a mic in a room while you're singing and playing guitar live. If you're wanting to know if this could be a good song. Yes. If you're wanting recording tips, I don't think you're quite there yet.
Record and mix the tracks separately. Add some drums and bass. Add a chorus with some loud guitars and scream a little, and you have a real fu*king song! LOL!
It brought back a lot of memories. It has potential. But you're going to have to bring more to the table if you want real feedback on this one.
Thanks for posting!