jeffmaher
New member
Cut the first 30 seconds.
Have the bass guitar play the bass drum figure..instead of twice the figure all the time. Better foundation. No contrast to the plinkety plink. Especially the verses.
Voice louder.
cut the solo at 1:30. Buh bye. Superfluous and boring.
At 2:33 there's an E7 chord that is..or should be...the peak of the hook. But there's no dominant 7 note. It should be HUGE. A big phat D...in the bass...sustaining, even.
Other than that, it's an interesting construction...nice hooks. Good tune. Just cut the deadwood, and bang out that E7!!
MHO
Have the bass guitar play the bass drum figure..instead of twice the figure all the time. Better foundation. No contrast to the plinkety plink. Especially the verses.
Voice louder.
cut the solo at 1:30. Buh bye. Superfluous and boring.
At 2:33 there's an E7 chord that is..or should be...the peak of the hook. But there's no dominant 7 note. It should be HUGE. A big phat D...in the bass...sustaining, even.
Other than that, it's an interesting construction...nice hooks. Good tune. Just cut the deadwood, and bang out that E7!!
MHO