Here's a new original song called Delilah. My first [edit: fourth...] attempt to mix it. All comments welcome, on mix, composition, performance, lyrics, arrangement, etc. Thanks!
[EDIT: New mix]
Delilah
Delilah dear, you been close to me
Like a ringing in my ear
And it hurts to see you go
We been quite the deal, you know Delilah
But you step on out across that floor
Turn to look one more time, just one more time
All your promises, they bleed across the floor
As you walk on through that door
Delilah
Down in the holler where you come from
Luck don’t bloom in the morning sun
And nothing laughs or cries
Past the broken windows and bitter ends
You’re a runaway train on a wicked wind
Heading for the bend
Delilah
You gazed upon this twisted world
And smiled your crooked smile of love
While all your boys in tattered jeans
Lay their shattered dreams outside your door
Delilah please don’t believe in them no more
When I first set my sights on you
In your red hair, lace, and your eyes of blue
And the coal dust belching from your ears
As you walked me down your trail of tears
All my cares went away, it seemed
All the tell-me-whys and the what-it-means
Just vanished in the creases of your jeans
Delilah
And now you’re step on off that ledge to fly
And you might reach the sky
Or make a last Bansai
Well you cut my hair, you took my car
Delilah please don’t stray too far
You always was a part of me
I’m standing like an amputee
Delilah
You gazed upon this wicked world and smiled
Your crooked smile of love
Now my heart’s as dry as the Aral Sea
And my love’s gone home to Tennessee
Delilah, what you seen in me
But the broken springs of time?
Delilah
You gazed upon this wicked world and smiled
Your crooked smile of love
While all your boys in tattered jeans
Lay their shattered dreams outside your door
Delilah, please
(Word and Music Ray Taylor, 2015)
[EDIT: New mix]
Delilah
Delilah dear, you been close to me
Like a ringing in my ear
And it hurts to see you go
We been quite the deal, you know Delilah
But you step on out across that floor
Turn to look one more time, just one more time
All your promises, they bleed across the floor
As you walk on through that door
Delilah
Down in the holler where you come from
Luck don’t bloom in the morning sun
And nothing laughs or cries
Past the broken windows and bitter ends
You’re a runaway train on a wicked wind
Heading for the bend
Delilah
You gazed upon this twisted world
And smiled your crooked smile of love
While all your boys in tattered jeans
Lay their shattered dreams outside your door
Delilah please don’t believe in them no more
When I first set my sights on you
In your red hair, lace, and your eyes of blue
And the coal dust belching from your ears
As you walked me down your trail of tears
All my cares went away, it seemed
All the tell-me-whys and the what-it-means
Just vanished in the creases of your jeans
Delilah
And now you’re step on off that ledge to fly
And you might reach the sky
Or make a last Bansai
Well you cut my hair, you took my car
Delilah please don’t stray too far
You always was a part of me
I’m standing like an amputee
Delilah
You gazed upon this wicked world and smiled
Your crooked smile of love
Now my heart’s as dry as the Aral Sea
And my love’s gone home to Tennessee
Delilah, what you seen in me
But the broken springs of time?
Delilah
You gazed upon this wicked world and smiled
Your crooked smile of love
While all your boys in tattered jeans
Lay their shattered dreams outside your door
Delilah, please
(Word and Music Ray Taylor, 2015)
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