Hey guys, I just wrote a song and I was hoping to improve my skills as a songwriter a bit by getting some constructive opinions. So lemme know what you think.. this is only a rough demo so I didn't pay too much attention to making everything perfect recording-or-performance-wise, audiophiles and perfectionists be forewarned.
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Humpty's Demise
Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall
Humpty Dumpty had a great fall
Humpty Dumpty became unwound
Reached for an illusion and fell to the ground
Fairytale story, horrorshow end
Humpty's all broken, it's all just pretend
All the kings horses and all the kings men
Couldn't put Humpty together again
Humpty Dumpty was deviled inside
But his happiness he'd be denied
Humpty Dumpty was hit by surprise
Yolk all around him and tears in his eyes
Fairytale story, horrorshow end
Humpty's all broken, it's all just pretend
All the kings horses and all the kings men
Couldn't put Humpty together again
Did you see him
Lying there in his shattered shell
Did you believe in
The story these cracks can tell
Fairytale story, horrorshow end
Humpty's all broken, it's all just pretend
All the kings horses and all the kings men
Couldn't put Humpty together again
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And of course, for those interested:
Vocals: MXL V67G>M-Audio DMP3
Guitar: MXL V67G>M-Audio DMP3
Bongos: SM-57 2 or 3 inches away, V67 a bit further back to pick up the room ambience>DMP3
Keys: SM-57>DMP3
Hey, I never claimed to have the world's biggest gear collection.
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Humpty's Demise
Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall
Humpty Dumpty had a great fall
Humpty Dumpty became unwound
Reached for an illusion and fell to the ground
Fairytale story, horrorshow end
Humpty's all broken, it's all just pretend
All the kings horses and all the kings men
Couldn't put Humpty together again
Humpty Dumpty was deviled inside
But his happiness he'd be denied
Humpty Dumpty was hit by surprise
Yolk all around him and tears in his eyes
Fairytale story, horrorshow end
Humpty's all broken, it's all just pretend
All the kings horses and all the kings men
Couldn't put Humpty together again
Did you see him
Lying there in his shattered shell
Did you believe in
The story these cracks can tell
Fairytale story, horrorshow end
Humpty's all broken, it's all just pretend
All the kings horses and all the kings men
Couldn't put Humpty together again
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And of course, for those interested:
Vocals: MXL V67G>M-Audio DMP3
Guitar: MXL V67G>M-Audio DMP3
Bongos: SM-57 2 or 3 inches away, V67 a bit further back to pick up the room ambience>DMP3
Keys: SM-57>DMP3
Hey, I never claimed to have the world's biggest gear collection.